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Post by Alpha on Mon Aug 25, 2008 8:41 pm

Story: Arath has caught up with Arth, and with a few curses, the duel begins. Meanwhile, the Republic is having a little trouble with the CIS. Will they prevail? And who will be the victor of this duel?


Bam-bam-bam! A droid up above fires a rocket and narrowly misses the troopers. BOOM!


Tzzt-tzzzz-tzzz! Arth is having a little trouble, as his former master uses all sorts of unorthadox swings and moves. After all, 10 years of exile is more then enough to master your lightsaber skills.


Arath then pushes Arth into the wall. "Fool!" he laughs. BOOM! Suddenly a misguided rocket from space hits the mountain. The lab shakes and the power goes out. Arath prepares to make then finishing blow.


Arth then jumps and falls to avoid the blow. Meanwhile, then battle underneath continues.


Bam-bam-bam! "530, watch out!" warns 3454 as he is almost hit by a nearby Battle Droid.


Unfortunatly, the droid fires rapidly, and 530 is shot twice in the stomach. "Agh!" he screams as he falls to the ground.


Arth and Arath clash for what seems the millionth time. Tzzzzzzzz! "You know you're weaker than me..." Arath sneers. "Is that so..." Arth grunts. It seems like Arth is holding on for now, but...


Arath uses his anger and he pushes Arth down again. The bridge then shakes as it is hit by enemy fire. Arath prepares to strike Arth but misses as Arth rolls to the right.


Tzzt! Bam-bam-bam!


Arth attempts to strike Arath but Arath quickly blocks. Tzzzzzzzt!


Arth then quickly jumps up and strikes Arath. But he blocks again. The bridge is once more hit by enemy fire and weakens.


"AHH!" Arth screams as Arath cuts his hand off. Arth falls to his knees. Meanwhile, his lightsaber falls ontop of a troopers head, giving him quite a shock. Arath prepares to finish Arth off once and for all.


But then he stops, and turns to glance something, Arth looks too, and sees a damaged STAP flying uncontroably towards the bridge!


BOOOM! "Agh..." mumbles Arth as he falls unconscious. Arath then jumps off and lands back next to the lab. A trooper manages to roll under a fallin beam that would have killed him, The other trooper spots Arth lying there, and tells the other trooper to carry them to a checkpoint where they can be picked up. "Commander!" 3454 says. "Arth is unconscious and his hand is chopped off by the looks of it." "I copy, I'll be there. Locking on to coordinates." Viper responds.


3454 picks up Arth's lightsaber. Meanwhile, 2310 holds Arth waiting for help.


"Sir! That was quick!" informs a surprised 2310 as Viper quickly runs up to the 3 of them. "I came as soon as possible trooper." he responds. 3454 gives Viper his lightsaber. 2310 and 3454 pick up Arth and follow Viper to his shuttle. Meanwhile Arath uses one of his wrist devices to activate his speeder platform. He then commands, "Retrieval at Mark 345, Autopilot engage!"


Arath then jumps, sensing where the speeder will be in a moment.


Arath then lands on his platform and pilots it away.

There you have it. Sorry for the wait. Hope you enjoy! Also I almost forgot, credit to Mongoose for the ammo crate!


Last edited by Alpha on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:46 am; edited 3 times in total

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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by legorevolution on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:01 am

The pics are working. Alpha you're becoming a great moccer Hola Wow! I like that battledroids gun with the black head and technic piece, that is such a great use. Good work on the bridge and not adding supports on the side facing the camera to give the idea that it was cut off from view. The walls don't really look very supportive, but they look great, and appear to be about the right thickness. Now lets see the end!
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:02 am

Thank goodness! Its finally working. Updating...

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Post by legorevolution on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:04 am

Alpha wrote:Thank goodness! Its finally working. Updating...

Sweet! I actually want to see the end of this. The lighting is also very good.
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:35 am

Finally pics are up. Took me like 30 min to write all that. Drove me insane.

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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Comrade Faie on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:40 am

great job, your becoming a prestige builder! The action is very good and I love it! Fordo Yo!

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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by flare on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:42 am

very nice alpha but i think you could have work a little bit more on the jedi names i got Run away! confussed Run away! which one was who though.

overall i like it Smile
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:45 am

Sorry bout that. Arath is 1 letter away form Arth. I just wanter to show they have a lot in common, Arath is a Sith "Master" and Arth is a Jedi Master. They both have a troubled past, and both have head strong apprentices (Arath's was Arth, and Arth's was Keya). Also, wait, no more. Razz

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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by flare on Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:49 am

im still so confussed Run away! man so confussed Run away!
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by legorevolution on Tue Aug 26, 2008 2:05 am

Wow that's such a good storyline. I loved the twist with the STAP and how the dark jedi overpowered the Jedi. He fled though!? That must mean he'll be back to finish him off Smile
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 26, 2008 2:09 am

Well Arath was injured slightly from the bridge, and even though he was a Sith, Arth was his old apprentice, and he couldn't bring himself to kill him. Do not think Arath gets redeemed. If he did, this battle wouldn't be taking place. Also, if Arath stayed on the bridge a second longer, he would have too, fallen unconscious and would have been shot by the troopers. But of course, I cant allow that to happen, as he has a more important role after Order66.

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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Zepher on Tue Aug 26, 2008 2:33 am

I like it, but again, more time would of made it even better! Some of your best work!
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by -Aki- on Tue Aug 26, 2008 9:20 am

Wow! Very nice work here! I like the bridge part!
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by DarthPineapple on Tue Aug 26, 2008 4:41 pm

The lab kinds dissapoints me of what you are capable of, I don't say it's not nice, but I just miss that feeling, like, hey, another MOC by Alpha!
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Astor on Tue Aug 26, 2008 7:51 pm

Cool! But "Landing on his platform"?
It looks more like a speeder...
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by major reviss on Tue Aug 26, 2008 11:39 pm

Because its a platform speeder Run away! . I don't know what they are officially called but they do exist.
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 26, 2008 11:57 pm

major reviss wrote:Because its a platform speeder Run away! . I don't know what they are officially called but they do exist.
Its a technically a speeder, but I call it a speeder platform, because speeders usually are sleek. Or, should I call it a Speeder Pod?

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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by major reviss on Wed Aug 27, 2008 12:00 am

I like the sound of speeder pod.
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by astoriabluelegos on Wed Aug 27, 2008 5:28 pm

Alpha, this is STUNNING! I love reading and looking at your work! This is by far your best yet! KEEP IT UP DUDE! Hola Wow! Blue Arc
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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Wed Aug 27, 2008 8:04 pm

That crafty Arath! *Shakes fist* (Gee, we need a *shakes fist* emoticon.)

I'm always a fan of high bridges (and the inevitable destruction that rains down upon them), so I liked this a lot. Razz A little more greebling in the lab would have been nice, but stuff blew up, so I'm happy.
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Astor on Sat Aug 30, 2008 9:50 pm

This is so awesome! But the battle under the bridge whould looked bigger if it was a vehicle of any sort there...
Awesome idea with the speeder pod! Do you mind if i copy it? Smile
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Re: Oxun Assault-Master vs Master

Post by Alpha on Sun Aug 31, 2008 12:14 am

Astor wrote:This is so awesome! But the battle under the bridge whould looked bigger if it was a vehicle of any sort there...
Awesome idea with the speeder pod! Do you mind if i copy it? Smile


No, I don't, but good luck making it! XD

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