Post 19 BBY-Death
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Post 19 BBY-Death
Story: After getting tracked to Tatooine, Keya goes to hide in Mos Ensa, the same place of the ambush that took place 3 years earlier. However, Commander Viper tracks her down, and with his battalion, prepares to move in. Will Keya get out alive? Or will her fate be the same as thousands of Jedi before her?
Bam-bam-bam-bam! Tzzt! Keya flashes her new lightsaber in an elegant whirl, having taken her dead master's lightsaber and robe. She deflects one of Viper's blaster bolts, which hits a nearby trooper.
After losing another two troopers, Viper shoots Keya's lightsaber out of her hand. Viper and TK-634 move in for the kill.
While Viper chooses the wrong time to reload his gun, Keya uses the Force to strangle a trooper, who gets sent flying into the bridge.
As Keya foolishly prepares to go melee on Viper, he grabs her by the neck and strangles her using brute strength. "Ach...ahhhh!" Keya groans as her neck is squeezed tighter and tighter.
Bam! Aaron sends a bolt through Viper's helmet, immediately killing the man who hired him for the ERS. "Are you alright?" he asks Keya. "Don't move!" she commands, ready to choke him.
"Very well. Listen to this. Two years ago, I was hired to work for the Republic as a spy by this man over here." Aaron replies, kicking Viper's dead body. "I worked alongside your old master, Arth, spying and killing." "I don't believe you. How come I was never told if Viper and Arth knew about this?" Keya questions.
"I was in a squad called the ERS. Me and my squadmates were under strict rules that it would be a secret. No one knew about the ERS, not even the Jedi, or even Emporer Palpatine himself." "Wait a minute... so the Chancellor was behind the war?!" Keya demands. "Yes, it was a lie. It was all a lie. The Republic you and I were fighting for has now been turned into a ruthless Empire."
"May I ask you who was on this ERS squad?" Keya asks. "I was the leader, there was also a man called Tory, who died on the last day of training. We also had a brave man by the name of Jack. And the last member was-"
"Brov." Brov replies coldly, as he points his gun directly at Keya's face. He is flanked by two troopers. One shoots Aaron with a stun gun. The other two move in to kill Keya once and for all.
"So, I wonder what you were doing here on Tatooine." implies Brov as he and TK-153 move in. "That's none of your buisness." replies Keya sarcastically. She tries to grab Brov's gun, but Brov grabs her hand and kicks her in the leg. "Trooper, you have the honors." Brov commands.
"Hmm-yuah!" Obi-wan arrives at the scene. "I'll hold him off, kill the Knight!" Brov commands. But Keya takes advantage of the distraction and snatches the gun out of 153's hands.
Obi-wan swiftly slices off Brov's hand and 153 and Brov's heads. "Are you alright?" asks the great Jedi Master.
"Yeah I'm fine." "Then let's go." Aaron suddenly gains consciousness and prepares to ask what is going on, but is inturrupted by Keya sayin they need to leave. They then leave the scene.
If you're wondering why the Stormtroopers don't have Stormtrooper armour, this happens immediately after Thar.
Bam-bam-bam-bam! Tzzt! Keya flashes her new lightsaber in an elegant whirl, having taken her dead master's lightsaber and robe. She deflects one of Viper's blaster bolts, which hits a nearby trooper.
After losing another two troopers, Viper shoots Keya's lightsaber out of her hand. Viper and TK-634 move in for the kill.
While Viper chooses the wrong time to reload his gun, Keya uses the Force to strangle a trooper, who gets sent flying into the bridge.
As Keya foolishly prepares to go melee on Viper, he grabs her by the neck and strangles her using brute strength. "Ach...ahhhh!" Keya groans as her neck is squeezed tighter and tighter.
Bam! Aaron sends a bolt through Viper's helmet, immediately killing the man who hired him for the ERS. "Are you alright?" he asks Keya. "Don't move!" she commands, ready to choke him.
"Very well. Listen to this. Two years ago, I was hired to work for the Republic as a spy by this man over here." Aaron replies, kicking Viper's dead body. "I worked alongside your old master, Arth, spying and killing." "I don't believe you. How come I was never told if Viper and Arth knew about this?" Keya questions.
"I was in a squad called the ERS. Me and my squadmates were under strict rules that it would be a secret. No one knew about the ERS, not even the Jedi, or even Emporer Palpatine himself." "Wait a minute... so the Chancellor was behind the war?!" Keya demands. "Yes, it was a lie. It was all a lie. The Republic you and I were fighting for has now been turned into a ruthless Empire."
"May I ask you who was on this ERS squad?" Keya asks. "I was the leader, there was also a man called Tory, who died on the last day of training. We also had a brave man by the name of Jack. And the last member was-"
"Brov." Brov replies coldly, as he points his gun directly at Keya's face. He is flanked by two troopers. One shoots Aaron with a stun gun. The other two move in to kill Keya once and for all.
"So, I wonder what you were doing here on Tatooine." implies Brov as he and TK-153 move in. "That's none of your buisness." replies Keya sarcastically. She tries to grab Brov's gun, but Brov grabs her hand and kicks her in the leg. "Trooper, you have the honors." Brov commands.
"Hmm-yuah!" Obi-wan arrives at the scene. "I'll hold him off, kill the Knight!" Brov commands. But Keya takes advantage of the distraction and snatches the gun out of 153's hands.
Obi-wan swiftly slices off Brov's hand and 153 and Brov's heads. "Are you alright?" asks the great Jedi Master.
"Yeah I'm fine." "Then let's go." Aaron suddenly gains consciousness and prepares to ask what is going on, but is inturrupted by Keya sayin they need to leave. They then leave the scene.
If you're wondering why the Stormtroopers don't have Stormtrooper armour, this happens immediately after Thar.
Last edited by Alpha on Sat Sep 06, 2008 12:33 am; edited 2 times in total
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
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I LOVE IT! The sceanery looked cool and the plot was awesome!
major reviss- Non-Guild Member
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I liked how you fit all that stuff onto that small of an area! I really liked the storyline too, good job!
Comrade Faie- Guild Member
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By the way, this is the same biggy as Ambush, as this is the same place where Keya and Brov got ambushed by terrorists.
Also ignore the blue saber piece and the red thing in the pics. I forgot to move them.
Also ignore the blue saber piece and the red thing in the pics. I forgot to move them.
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
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Give this man a medal! Lovin' the story's, lovin' the scenery, lovin' the clones. What set are the ERS's helmets from?
Arkane- Guild Member
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Let's see... Brov's ERS helmet is from the B-Wing, and Aaron's is from the A-Wing.
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
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Nice job, I like your MOCs and your stories, they're fun to read, and to look out, plus they're completly plausible, nice work!
astoriabluelegos- VIP Former Staff
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Cool! It would be even more awesome if you would add text ballons though.
DarthPineapple- VIP Former Staff
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Nice work! Got to love Obi-Wan's appearance at the end!
Axel- Non-Guild Member
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I swear, I'll kill someone if they mention text balloons ever again! Anyways, thanks!
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
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Alpha wrote:I swear, I'll kill someone if they mention text balloons ever again! Anyways, thanks!
I don't really think you need them. They'd just take up space on your scenes which would be a bad thing. Anyhow, great job!
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I use text balloons in my comic, but since your is built on such a small platform (not a bad thing) text balloons would take up way too much space.
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Nice bridge MOC, but Obi-Wan's appearance at the end seemed like a bit of a deus ex machina. I mean, I suppose it could happen, seeing as he's on Tatooine, but surely Mos Eisley's some way away from Mos Ensa. It'd be like me bumping into, I dunno... Zeph - Sure, we live on the same planet, but that still doesn't make us meeting very likely.
The Jinja Ninja- Evil Ornj Vizier
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The Jinja Ninja wrote:Nice bridge MOC, but Obi-Wan's appearance at the end seemed like a bit of a deus ex machina. I mean, I suppose it could happen, seeing as he's on Tatooine, but surely Mos Eisley's some way away from Mos Ensa. It'd be like me bumping into, I dunno... Zeph - Sure, we live on the same planet, but that still doesn't make us meeting very likely.
Good point Jinja, but to put that in perspective, during the Clone Wars, Clones invaded entire PLANETS, in "reality" it would probably take the ENTIRE Clone Army just to capture let alone HOLD an average Earth-size planet. So my point is, spacial-awarness in Starwars is sligthly under-played...
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astoriabluelegos- VIP Former Staff
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To me, it feels like Star Wars treats every planet almost like a country. Each planet has only one kind of culture and landscape.
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Thunder-blade wrote:To me, it feels like Star Wars treats every planet almost like a country. Each planet has only one kind of culture and landscape.
Yes, quite true indeed!
astoriabluelegos- VIP Former Staff
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Obi-wan sensed a disturbance in the force, and there's a thing called Force Speed.
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