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222nd Legion Chronicles - Holding the Line

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Post by Clonecommando007 Sat Oct 11, 2008 2:13 am

Greetings CABG members and guests!
I've finished adding the quotes to my second comic. It's a continuation of my first comic (click to read), so check that out first if you haven't. My legion has four seperate regiments, and every few comics I'll switch up Regiments.
Anyways, on to the comic!
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How did you like it? I rather liked it, but the judgement is up to you.
Hint on the next comic: Airborne
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Post by Axel Sat Oct 11, 2008 2:23 am

Nice comic so far! All those custom clones really make it more awesome!
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Post by J4ke Sat Oct 11, 2008 2:54 am

Very nice! I particularly like how you use lightsaber blades instead of Photoshopped effects.

One of the better comics I've seen here. Smile
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Post by Zepher Sat Oct 11, 2008 2:57 am

I really like it. lots of really awesome clones. There's something about the bravery and possbile personality of the clones that never really gets played up, but would be awesome. Both you and Sial use that, ut your comics, unlike Sial's have more characters, which I really like.
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Post by Lego_man2323 Sat Oct 11, 2008 6:20 am

I heart it, very dramatic.
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Post by DarthPineapple Sat Oct 11, 2008 7:43 am

Wow CC, you're one of the best comic makers here! I so LOVE this one, great work! Shocked Hola Wow! Smile
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Post by -Aki- Sat Oct 11, 2008 9:06 am

That was well cool! I can't wait for more!
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Post by Sialboats Sat Oct 11, 2008 12:14 pm

Very good, but the diolog could be better.


And I see you've got my "Chronicles" Razz .
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Post by Clonecommando007 Sat Oct 11, 2008 1:01 pm

Thanks for all your comments!
Yes, I do like the title 'Chronicles'.

On the subject of 'Diologue', this comic wasn't really for that so much. My next comic will feature more diologue in several situations!
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Post by Sialboats Sat Oct 11, 2008 5:45 pm

Clonecommando007 wrote:On the subject of 'Diologue', this comic wasn't really for that so much. My next comic will feature more diologue in several situations!

Some of it felt strange... like the droids calling Ventress "Supreme Leader" instead of "Colonel", or a droid saying that the "target range is almost locked" in the Clone Wars Series. It just doesn't sit right, y'know.

In your comic for example: "...take that tinny SBD down!" , the order to all advance and avenge the General, or obtaining a lock on something when you've got a free-fire rotary cannon.

Tinny is very specific with usage.

  • "Fierfek... we've got tinnies, strength one-hundred, coming up the road." (Most often times a noun.)
  • "Take that you tinny bastards!" (When describing invective. The bastards are tinnies.)


A officer wouldn't risk botching a whole attack to avenge his superior. And having to lock on to something with your rotary, is like having to lock on with a AK-47. It's free fire.


Thats my two credits, at least Smile .
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Post by TK47 Sat Oct 11, 2008 7:03 pm

Yay, I was waiting for this, you make it so fun to read, I think you should make an official comic for the clone wars grand army of the republic Smile
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Post by thunder-clone Sat Oct 11, 2008 7:05 pm

Thats really good, theres an urge in me to tell you it was good for hours but, the ending was the best, because of the brilliant bridge scene. The begging is good too but not as good. Yellow Kashyyyk
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Post by Clonecommando007 Sat Oct 11, 2008 7:15 pm

Yea I personally think the diolouge in this sucked, for the reasons that Sialboats pointed out and for others. But heh, I hope to get better.
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