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Rhen Var-PII

Post by -Aki- on Mon Oct 13, 2008 4:57 pm

Story: After taking care of the outpost, our heroes continue the journey to find the Arbiter...

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Plus, it is my first try with SFX and text! Hooray!
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Post by DarthPineapple on Mon Oct 13, 2008 4:58 pm

Pretty cool! Now resize your pics and post them 1 by 1 with IMG tags and you have a pretty good story! Smile
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Re: Rhen Var-PII

Post by -Aki- on Mon Oct 13, 2008 4:59 pm

DarthPineapple wrote:Pretty cool! Now resize your pics and post them 1 by 1 with IMG tags and you have a pretty good story! Smile

I can't resize them because my computer is having some problems, but I agree, I am proud of it to!
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Post by Bly on Mon Oct 13, 2008 5:00 pm

DarthPineapple wrote:Pretty cool! Now resize your pics and post them 1 by 1 with IMG tags and you have a pretty good story! Smile

And a good way to do this is via the sites image hosting server. Just click on the picture with a floppy disk over it and do it from there.

Onto the MOC, I enjoyed reading it! The scenery needs some improvement though. But it was fairly good. A toast!
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Re: Rhen Var-PII

Post by Clonecommando007 on Mon Oct 13, 2008 10:22 pm

Here's my expert opinion. Well, more or less. Wink

Pros:
- Effects make it seem more action packed, and less like the droids are just falling apart.
- Text in the pictures was better.
- It's white like Rhen Var.
- Camera is much more focused.
- The clones look pretty good, excepting the commander who is a bit sloppy. Yellow

Cons:
- The bases were really small and you could see that very easily.
- The blaster fire was really big and bright and annoying and corny at times.
- Do droids ever say Mommy? I didn't think so...
- The Clone Troopers and the Jedi make a huge deal over losing one kriffing soldier. They aren't supposed to feel remorse like that for just a single expendable trooper. Otherwise the whole war would be just a bunch of sobbing identical men in white.
- The pictures are still rather big and take a few seconds to load.

Overall:
Much improved over your last attempt. But there are many things you still have to learn, young padawan... Razz

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Re: Rhen Var-PII

Post by The Jinja Ninja on Tue Oct 14, 2008 1:02 am

Clonecommando007 wrote:- The Clone Troopers and the Jedi make a huge deal over losing one kriffing soldier. They aren't supposed to feel remorse like that for just a single expendable trooper. Otherwise the whole war would be just a bunch of sobbing identical men in white.
That would be really surreal. There's probably a painting like that somewhere. Razz
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