Rhen Var-PII

Story: After taking care of the outpost, our heroes continue the journey to find the Arbiter...

Gallery

Plus, it is my first try with SFX and text! Hooray!

Pretty cool! Now resize your pics and post them 1 by 1 with IMG tags and you have a pretty good story!

DarthPineapple wrote:Pretty cool! Now resize your pics and post them 1 by 1 with IMG tags and you have a pretty good story!

I can't resize them because my computer is having some problems, but I agree, I am proud of it to!

DarthPineapple wrote:Pretty cool! Now resize your pics and post them 1 by 1 with IMG tags and you have a pretty good story!

And a good way to do this is via the sites image hosting server. Just click on the picture with a floppy disk over it and do it from there.

Onto the MOC, I enjoyed reading it! The scenery needs some improvement though. But it was fairly good.

Here's my expert opinion. Well, more or less.

Pros:
- Effects make it seem more action packed, and less like the droids are just falling apart.
- Text in the pictures was better.
- It's white like Rhen Var.
- Camera is much more focused.
- The clones look pretty good, excepting the commander who is a bit sloppy.

Cons:
- The bases were really small and you could see that very easily.
- The blaster fire was really big and bright and annoying and corny at times.
- Do droids ever say Mommy? I didn't think so...
- The Clone Troopers and the Jedi make a huge deal over losing one kriffing soldier. They aren't supposed to feel remorse like that for just a single expendable trooper. Otherwise the whole war would be just a bunch of sobbing identical men in white.
- The pictures are still rather big and take a few seconds to load.

Overall:
Much improved over your last attempt. But there are many things you still have to learn, young padawan...

Clonecommando007 wrote:- The Clone Troopers and the Jedi make a huge deal over losing one kriffing soldier. They aren't supposed to feel remorse like that for just a single expendable trooper. Otherwise the whole war would be just a bunch of sobbing identical men in white.

That would be really surreal. There's probably a painting like that somewhere.