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727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

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727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Jedi Joe on Wed Oct 15, 2008 2:52 am

Peril has struck Metalorn! The Seperatists set up a factory on the planet, building massive fleets of droids and recently completing a new Flagship for the Seperatist leader General Grievous, the FIREFLIGHT. The Republic has sent the 44th Corps to stop the Fireflight from taking action. The campaign has gone badly so far for the Republic, but they still have hope, the roots are still prone to action.

The 727th has been assigned the mission to stop factory production, having sent General Seph Groundglider, the supplier, Zorro the Hutt, has refused to shut down production. Drastic action will be taken with Zorro's palace, and there is still a chance for the Republic to win the battle...


Tornado: Men, we are winning, Do not back down!


Clone: Captain, I have a feeling this isn't over yet...
Tornado: It ain't over 'till it's over, grunt! Keep shooting!


Super Battle Droid: We're doomed!
Tornado: YEEHAW!!! The battle is won... with only a few men left.


Tornado: Status report, General Arkhal!
Reese: Master Seph and Commander Blazer will rendevous with us any time now...
Heavy Trooper: Um, Captain, we got a spider droid!
Tornado: Nerfherders! I have a plan, men. Reese, turn your saber off... We are surrendering.


Tornado: We surrender, don't hurt us! You have won!
Clone: Are you mad, Captain?!
Tornado: Trust me, grunt, I have this under control...


Seph: Reese, what the blazes is going on?!
Reese: Calm down, Master. We are faking an act of surrender.


Blazer: I have a plan of my own.


Reese: What are you doing with a lost soldier's rocket launcher?
Blazer: Trust me on this, Jedi...


Blazer: I hope you guys ain't afraid of jumping off bridges!
Tornado: What?!
Dwarf Spider: Huh, what did he say?


Tornado: Commander, what are you doing?!
Blazer: Just hang on to something and jump!


Tornado: Whoa! Hang on, grunts!
Dwarf Spider: Hey!


Blazer: General, we need to order a gunship at the entrance before more droids come.
Seph: Do that, Commander. Get 'Nado and the survivors up first, we're gonna blow this place to bits...


Blazer: OK, guys, up n' at 'em. We're still on the move...


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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Alpha on Wed Oct 15, 2008 2:54 am

Nice. I like the bridge and the concept of the Bridge getting blown up. But, didn't I tell you to replace Alpha with Grievous? Laughing

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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Jedi Joe on Wed Oct 15, 2008 3:27 am

I don't remember you telling me that, but I did anyway Mr. Hasafleainhisunderpants! Razz
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by -Aki- on Wed Oct 15, 2008 4:38 pm

That was pretty good. I like Tornado the most. But I don't think calling troopers "Grunts" is very encouraging Razz.
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Jedi Joe on Wed Oct 15, 2008 4:42 pm

Aki-kundu wrote:That was pretty good. I like Tornado the most. But I don't think calling troopers "Grunts" is very encouraging Razz.

The clones basically got used to it, and people in Military Command always have nicknames for the little guys! Razz Besides, they call him Captain 'Nado as a nickname sometimes, which he isn't very fond of. Razz
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Clonecommando007 on Wed Oct 15, 2008 10:04 pm

I like the backround story, but I didn't think Dwarf Spiders could talk... Wink

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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Jedi Joe on Wed Oct 15, 2008 10:24 pm

Well, SBDs can, and Vulture Droids can, so why not Dwarf Spiders? Razz
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Bly on Wed Oct 15, 2008 10:34 pm

Jedi Joe wrote:Well, SBDs can, and Vulture Droids can, so why not Dwarf Spiders? Razz

They do use a form of communication but it isn't talking. Razz
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by DarthPineapple on Thu Oct 16, 2008 10:25 am

Add more special effects and text balloons.
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by 80-0 on Thu Oct 16, 2008 2:48 pm

OK, there are three levels of canon here. Razz

1. Full Canon. Dwarf Spider Droids don't talk Galactic Basic.

2. Semi-canon. They speak a garbled tongue but it shouldn't be able to be heard by 'wets', like Droidekas.

3. Non-canon. They speak basic. But they shouldn't have a personality like that.

Interesting stuff! But how exactly does the tower get pushed over? Sorry for the requested specification, but I just don't see the physics. Embarassed

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Re:727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by TK47 on Thu Oct 16, 2008 4:32 pm

Same with all comics I view, seeing real life backgrounds just ruins the comic and it doesn't create an illusion of the figures being real, which it should.
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn #2: Chaos in the factory

Post by Jedi Joe on Thu Oct 16, 2008 9:06 pm

CommandoEighty-Oh wrote:OK, there are three levels of canon here. Razz

1. Full Canon. Dwarf Spider Droids don't talk Galactic Basic.

2. Semi-canon. They speak a garbled tongue but it shouldn't be able to be heard by 'wets', like Droidekas.

3. Non-canon. They speak basic. But they shouldn't have a personality like that.

Interesting stuff! But how exactly does the tower get pushed over? Sorry for the requested specification, but I just don't see the physics. Embarassed

The rocket blasts the pillar holding it up, and it plummets down to the ground! Razz

TK47 wrote:Same with all comics I view, seeing real life backgrounds just ruins the comic and it doesn't create an illusion of the figures being real, which it should.

Well then you will just have to suffer, I have no room to set up a good backdrop.
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