Original 541st Chronicles #7: Past and Present
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Original 541st Chronicles #7: Past and Present
The next one will have plenty more action and special effects. This is just plot development . A cookie to anyone who can guess what is going on in the four first slides.
Last edited by Sialboats on Fri Oct 17, 2008 5:59 pm; edited 1 time in total
Re: Original 541st Chronicles #7: Past and Present
Make your pictures smaller, some text disappears because they are too big. Nice comic though.
DarthPineapple- VIP Former Staff
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Location : The Netherlands
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I really like the bedroom and the bar area! That is pretty awesome! Nice work on that, and the dream animation too!
Clonecommando007- Kinda like a UFO
- Location : Ohio
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Meh, not as good as your other ones. I really don't like all the language at the beginning, and you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.
Overall, it had some great humor in it as well, but just keep working on it.
Overall, it had some great humor in it as well, but just keep working on it.
Jedi Joe- Guild Member
- Location : Florida, the state of neverending heat and humidity...
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Heh, we need a name for "the lass in charge of the 815th Corps." Comic-wise, work on positioning and colouring of captions and try a few variations on dialogue - sometimes it doesn't really come across as natural.
Also, why is it the 'Origional' 541st Chronicles?
Also, why is it the 'Origional' 541st Chronicles?
The Jinja Ninja- Evil Ornj Vizier
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Location : Timeline No. 1
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Jedi Joe wrote:...you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.
How so? It didn't clip out unless I wanted it to, and it didn't obstruct characters or important items.
The Jinja Ninja wrote:....colouring of captions and try a few variations on dialogue - sometimes it doesn't really come across as natural.
Also, why is it the 'Origional' 541st Chronicles?
I'll stick with black and white, but if you could expatiate on the lack of... natural-ness... It'd be appreciated.
Doh ! And I've noticed all the "Chronicles" lately....
Thanks for the feedback folks! Not much I can do about it being not as good as my others. Needed some character building. The next one 'ought to have some nice effects if I get it right !
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Sialboats wrote:Jedi Joe wrote:...you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.
How so? It didn't clip out unless I wanted it to, and it didn't obstruct characters or important items.
Didn't know which caption came first. Here is a tip, go from Left to Right, or Top to Bottom, or both. That is what comic writers take into consideration while making the captions, it causes so much less confusion.
Jedi Joe- Guild Member
- Location : Florida, the state of neverending heat and humidity...
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Looks cool! I like the flashback!
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Thats a cool flashback "Take this you republic whore!!!( )"also hilarous.
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I know where the pics 1-4 come from! The stark hyperspace war!
-Aki-- Non-Guild Member
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Jedi Joe wrote:Sialboats wrote:Jedi Joe wrote:...you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.
How so? It didn't clip out unless I wanted it to, and it didn't obstruct characters or important items.
Didn't know which caption came first. Here is a tip, go from Left to Right, or Top to Bottom, or both. That is what comic writers take into consideration while making the captions, it causes so much less confusion.
I tried working with that early on, but didn't take into account where I would place text so I could manuever the figures according to that. I'll have to write out my scripts and plot from now on (or after ther eighth, for I have already started that).
Aki-kundu wrote:I know where the pics 1-4 come from! The stark hyperspace war!
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Mari'ot hotel - nice. Another great addition to your series sial!
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I love it Sialboats! I really like the flashback, though you could combine it with some black and white!
Can't wait for some action!
Can't wait for some action!
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commanderbly42 wrote:Mari'ot hotel - nice.
I was wondering if anyone would notice that !
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Nice, the hotel looked cool and I can't wait for the next one to come out (if there is one).
thunder-clone- Non-Guild Member
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Wonderful work as always, finally a third character! W00T! I didn't get that the Colonel was also the guy with the scout armour, thanks for clearing that up!
Last edited by Zepher on Sat Oct 18, 2008 9:28 pm; edited 1 time in total
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I love your comics, and aways will! Keep it up!
And, Zepher, it's spelled Colonel, I think...
Thanks Dude!
And, Zepher, it's spelled Colonel, I think...
Thanks Dude!
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