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Original 541st Chronicles #7: Past and Present

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Post by Sialboats Fri Oct 17, 2008 2:07 pm

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The next one will have plenty more action and special effects. This is just plot development Smile . A cookie to anyone who can guess what is going on in the four first slides.


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Post by DarthPineapple Fri Oct 17, 2008 2:48 pm

Make your pictures smaller, some text disappears because they are too big. Nice comic though. Smile
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Post by Clonecommando007 Fri Oct 17, 2008 3:29 pm

I really like the bedroom and the bar area! That is pretty awesome! Nice work on that, and the dream animation too!
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Post by Jedi Joe Fri Oct 17, 2008 3:37 pm

Meh, not as good as your other ones. I really don't like all the language at the beginning, and you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.

Overall, it had some great humor in it as well, but just keep working on it.
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Post by The Jinja Ninja Fri Oct 17, 2008 4:18 pm

Heh, we need a name for "the lass in charge of the 815th Corps." Razz Comic-wise, work on positioning and colouring of captions and try a few variations on dialogue - sometimes it doesn't really come across as natural.

Also, why is it the 'Origional' 541st Chronicles?
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Post by Sialboats Fri Oct 17, 2008 5:58 pm

Jedi Joe wrote:...you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.

How so? It didn't clip out unless I wanted it to, and it didn't obstruct characters or important items.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:....colouring of captions and try a few variations on dialogue - sometimes it doesn't really come across as natural.

Also, why is it the 'Origional' 541st Chronicles?

I'll stick with black and white, but if you could expatiate on the lack of... natural-ness... It'd be appreciated.

Doh Wink ! And I've noticed all the "Chronicles" lately....



Thanks for the feedback folks! Not much I can do about it being not as good as my others. Needed some character building. The next one 'ought to have some nice effects if I get it right Smile !
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Post by Jedi Joe Fri Oct 17, 2008 6:03 pm

Sialboats wrote:
Jedi Joe wrote:...you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.

How so? It didn't clip out unless I wanted it to, and it didn't obstruct characters or important items.

Didn't know which caption came first. Here is a tip, go from Left to Right, or Top to Bottom, or both. That is what comic writers take into consideration while making the captions, it causes so much less confusion.
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Post by -Aki- Fri Oct 17, 2008 7:19 pm

Looks cool! I like the flashback!
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Post by Delta 77-Ponce Fri Oct 17, 2008 9:45 pm

Thats a cool flashback "Take this you republic whore!!!( Razz )"also hilarous.
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Post by -Aki- Fri Oct 17, 2008 9:49 pm

I know where the pics 1-4 come from! The stark hyperspace war!
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Post by Sialboats Fri Oct 17, 2008 10:30 pm

Jedi Joe wrote:
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Jedi Joe wrote:...you REALLY need to work on your caption placing.

How so? It didn't clip out unless I wanted it to, and it didn't obstruct characters or important items.

Didn't know which caption came first. Here is a tip, go from Left to Right, or Top to Bottom, or both. That is what comic writers take into consideration while making the captions, it causes so much less confusion.

I tried working with that early on, but didn't take into account where I would place text so I could manuever the figures according to that. I'll have to write out my scripts and plot from now on (or after ther eighth, for I have already started that).

Aki-kundu wrote:I know where the pics 1-4 come from! The stark hyperspace war!

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Post by Bly Sat Oct 18, 2008 1:03 am

Mari'ot hotel - nice. Laughing Another great addition to your series sial! Smile
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Post by Thunder-blade Sat Oct 18, 2008 1:07 am

I love it Sialboats! I really like the flashback, though you could combine it with some black and white!

Can't wait for some action!
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Post by Sialboats Sat Oct 18, 2008 11:32 am

commanderbly42 wrote:Mari'ot hotel - nice.

I was wondering if anyone would notice that Razz !
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Post by thunder-clone Sat Oct 18, 2008 12:29 pm

Nice, the hotel looked cool and I can't wait for the next one to come out (if there is one).
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Post by Zepher Sat Oct 18, 2008 9:06 pm

Wonderful work as always, finally a third character! W00T! I didn't get that the Colonel was also the guy with the scout armour, thanks for clearing that up!


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Post by Commander Lukas Sat Oct 18, 2008 9:19 pm

I love your comics, and aways will! Keep it up!

And, Zepher, it's spelled Colonel, I think...

Thanks Dude!
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