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Alzoc III - Betrayal

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Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 3:41 am



















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The command centre was originally going to be bigger, but I was pressured with time. Enjoy!

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Thunder-blade on Thu Nov 27, 2008 3:44 am

Nice! Again the snow looks good! And the comic dialogue is pretty good!

What font are those numbers!! I want it!!
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 3:46 am

If any of you were attentive, you would've noticed that bomb is the same Plasma Charge from Toran. Another of Alpha's creations, it can't be defused.

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Darth Yoda on Thu Nov 27, 2008 3:47 am

I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built! Smile
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 3:49 am

darth yoda wrote:I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built! Smile

The snow is brickbuilt... Actually, there really is no snow, besides the snow on the walls.

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Darth Yoda on Thu Nov 27, 2008 3:55 am

Alpha wrote:
darth yoda wrote:I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built! Smile

The snow is brickbuilt... Actually, there really is no snow, besides the snow on the walls.

In the first picture the killed droids are on a white towel, no lego landscaping... Sad
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:00 am

darth yoda wrote:
Alpha wrote:
darth yoda wrote:I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built! Smile

The snow is brickbuilt... Actually, there really is no snow, besides the snow on the walls.

In the first picture the killed droids are on a white towel, no lego landscaping... Sad

That was a scene from the last battle. And if you expect me to do something like this...


http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?i=3472165

You'll see that by the end of the century. I don't have unlimited pieces. Wink

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Darth Yoda on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:20 am

I don't expect that from you, but if you keep on building the same things you won't get much better... Surprised
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by vecol05 on Thu Nov 27, 2008 5:36 am

I say this is a weird moc.

Admin - Please be more specific and post constructive criticism.
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by 80-0 on Thu Nov 27, 2008 12:37 pm

vecol05 wrote:I say this is a weird moc.

Aaand why is that a productive comment?

WHY is it a weird MOC?

I say it's pretty dang awesome, as the preceding comics have been! Smile

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Jeremy012399 on Thu Nov 27, 2008 1:03 pm

Nice I like it, it might need some work, but good job.

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Bantha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 2:04 pm

Nice job once again! I really like the end. Wink
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by The Jinja Ninja on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:01 pm

Work on your positioning of text balloons - in panels 2 and 3, the dialogue looks the wrong way around. For stuff like the last two panels, check if your camera has a 'super macro' setting (or something similar). If not, see what you can do digitally, as it looks too blotchy at the moment.
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:02 pm

I know. I spent half an hour toggling with the macro functions. I was thinking of enlarging the picture on GIMP, but I thought it wouldn't work. And is there a super macro function?

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by thunder-clone on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:14 pm

Awesome Alpha, that bomb looks great and very nice story.
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by The Jinja Ninja on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:30 pm

Alpha wrote:And is there a super macro function?
My camera has one. It's great if you take the picture about a centimetre away from the subject. Razz
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by 80-0 on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:31 pm

WOW. That's amazing. But doesen't it cast a shadow on it if you use flash?

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Thu Nov 27, 2008 4:45 pm

Wow. I envy your camera! I need those close-ups! Waaa!

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Clonecommando007 on Fri Nov 28, 2008 12:35 am

I like the idea of a bomb triggered when the Republic enters the base. Nice job on this!!!

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Comrade Faie on Sat Nov 29, 2008 1:26 am

Sort of small, but at least it is detailed. I like it, but it is not your best.

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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by Sialboats on Sat Nov 29, 2008 12:22 pm

I agree on the detail, but it's a little awkward, some of the speech. I still envy those epic-glowy bolts though!

And why are there grey lines running up and down the first picture :scratch: ?
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by DarthPineapple on Sat Nov 29, 2008 2:51 pm

The MOC is simple but effective. Why does the assassin has a black head?
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Re: Alzoc III - Betrayal

Post by -Aki- on Sat Nov 29, 2008 3:01 pm

You known Arath? He wears a pressure mask, and his head is black, so maybe the assasin is Wink.
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