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Tales from the 42nd #1

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Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by [Jay] on Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:30 pm

After a mission Master Hoon Jinn, Commander Echo and a group of surviving clone troopers travel to their venator, but soon they are shot down by a CIS turret and are forced to crash land on a deserted and empty plantet.











To be continued...






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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by pdragon27 on Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:33 pm

Pretty nice, though you could add some hills and mountains though...
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by 667thLegion on Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:34 pm

I like the droid commander at the end, but maybe ad some more peices to his head, to cover up the studs. And always make your comic read from left --> right, up--> down. It's alot easier to read that way. Wink
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by Jedi Joe on Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:34 pm

Very nice! I like the alien Jedi!

Although it is lacking details, so it would be good if you worked on that.
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by [Jay] on Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:35 pm

Sorry, Its my first ever comic, so the next ones will be better.

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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by -Aki- on Sun Jan 25, 2009 2:56 pm

OK. The planet is a baseplate with a smashed LAAT, some plants, and a patch of water. It needs hills, and stuff like that.

I have also noticed of how you used Uber's idea of a crashed gunship, and PD's of discovering water.

All in all, not to shabby.
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by pdragon27 on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:00 pm

Except for the fact that the discovery of water actually makes sense here and it didn't (or no one thought it did) in mine. They're looking for supplies so finding water is a good thing. (unless its poisoned of course) Razz
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by -Aki- on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:01 pm

Ah. I couldn't read a speech bubble, because it was chopped off.

Why is that trooper going for a swim in the second to last photo?
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by pdragon27 on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:03 pm

To relax from a stressful day? Razz
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by [Jay] on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:38 pm

I think for the next comic the clones will hide in the mountins, so it will get a bit more rocky. Razz

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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by Comrade Faie on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:38 pm

The plot is a bit jumpy to me, the build is okay though.

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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by Blue-Thunder on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:43 pm

Aki-kundu wrote:
Why is that trooper going for a swim in the second to last photo?
I have the same question and I'm pretty sure its not to relax.Its probably a trap or something that goes like this: Waaa! Kabam! .
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by [Jay] on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:50 pm

Oh no ,you found out my plot (not)

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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by pdragon27 on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:51 pm

Heh, you should enter that quote in the Oh No! Contest.
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by [Jay] on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:53 pm

pdragon27 wrote:Heh, you should enter that quote in the Oh No! Contest.

Sorry I didn't understand that.

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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by Blue-Thunder on Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:59 pm

Matchstick wrote:Oh no ,you found out my plot (not)
Yay I figured it out! Oh wait when I look closer it say "not" in small letters awwwwwww...
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Re: Tales from the 42nd #1

Post by Thunder-blade on Mon Jan 26, 2009 1:26 am

Not bad for a first try!

Like most have said it's a tad choppy (the storyline) but that's ok, it can be fixed with pracice!
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