Tales from the 42nd #1

After a mission Master Hoon Jinn, Commander Echo and a group of surviving clone troopers travel to their venator, but soon they are shot down by a CIS turret and are forced to crash land on a deserted and empty plantet.











To be continued...

Pretty nice, though you could add some hills and mountains though...

I like the droid commander at the end, but maybe ad some more peices to his head, to cover up the studs. And always make your comic read from left --> right, up--> down. It's alot easier to read that way.

Very nice! I like the alien Jedi!

Although it is lacking details, so it would be good if you worked on that.

Sorry, Its my first ever comic, so the next ones will be better.

OK. The planet is a baseplate with a smashed LAAT, some plants, and a patch of water. It needs hills, and stuff like that.

I have also noticed of how you used Uber's idea of a crashed gunship, and PD's of discovering water.

All in all, not to shabby.

Except for the fact that the discovery of water actually makes sense here and it didn't (or no one thought it did) in mine. They're looking for supplies so finding water is a good thing. (unless its poisoned of course)

Ah. I couldn't read a speech bubble, because it was chopped off.

Why is that trooper going for a swim in the second to last photo?

To relax from a stressful day?

I think for the next comic the clones will hide in the mountins, so it will get a bit more rocky.

The plot is a bit jumpy to me, the build is okay though.

Aki-kundu wrote:
Why is that trooper going for a swim in the second to last photo?

I have the same question and I'm pretty sure its not to relax.Its probably a trap or something that goes like this: .

Oh no ,you found out my plot (not)

Heh, you should enter that quote in the Oh No! Contest.

pdragon27 wrote:Heh, you should enter that quote in the Oh No! Contest.

Sorry I didn't understand that.

Matchstick wrote:Oh no ,you found out my plot (not)

Yay I figured it out! Oh wait when I look closer it say "not" in small letters awwwwwww...

Not bad for a first try!

Like most have said it's a tad choppy (the storyline) but that's ok, it can be fixed with pracice!