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Post by Rogue Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:10 pm

This one man landspeeder contains a swoop-like repulsorlift engine.
Enjoy! Razz

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Post by pdragon27 Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:12 pm

Its okay... first off, don't mix those colors...it looks really bad. Secondly, that should be a one man speeder...Its waaayyy too small for two people.
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Post by Rogue Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:18 pm

Pdragon wrote:Its okay... first off, don't mix those colors...it looks really bad. Secondly, that should be a one man speeder...Its waaayyy too small for two people.

It's the only colors I got and if you don't like it then you can leave.
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Post by -Aki- Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:25 pm

Really? Sure your not bluffing? Because I just watched your movies, and you appeared to have a very hefty collection.

What I do is that after I build a moc, I make a mental list of what is good and bad about it. Then I improve on what is bad about it. Try it, and see how you can improve.
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Post by Comrade Faie Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:34 pm

A bit multi-colored and jumbled looking but it isn't that bad.
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Post by pdragon27 Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:34 pm

Rogue wrote:
Pdragon wrote:Its okay... first off, don't mix those colors...it looks really bad. Secondly, that should be a one man speeder...Its waaayyy too small for two people.

It's the only colors I got and if you don't like it then you can leave.


And if you don't like criticism, then YOU can get out.
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Post by Rogue Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:38 pm

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Rogue wrote:
Pdragon wrote:Its okay... first off, don't mix those colors...it looks really bad. Secondly, that should be a one man speeder...Its waaayyy too small for two people.

It's the only colors I got and if you don't like it then you can leave.


And if you don't like criticism, then YOU can get out.

...And if you don't like chickens with grenades then you can exit the area.... :spammers:

Seriously lets get back on topic. Razz
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Post by -Aki- Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:48 pm

Yay. Just what we want. I internet drama, PD style Roll Eyes.

Seriously PD, there is a line between giving critisism and being plan mean, and you often cross it. Sure it may be jumbled and multi coloured, but just saying the negative points isn't good for their self esteem. When you want to give "Critisism", say the good points as well. If their isn't any good points, don't post! If you carry on, then people will just hate you.

Anyway, I would have said more about the moc earlier, but my finger was killing me. But now it has recovered, and I can type, it's back to buisiness. Remember what I said about the mental lists? Well, If I made this, then mine would look like this:
Good points
  • Nice concept
    Sleek shape


Bad points
  • Multi coloured
    Jumbeled
    use of ugly tan peices
    To small for a two man speeder


So how can you improve this? Firstly, loose the tan. That is the main let-down of the moc, so it's best to loose it first. You also used mulitple shades of gray. It's best to stick to one. I noticed those spiffy blue peices you used for the front. Do you have any others of the same colour? If so, then use them! Light grey and this nice blue will look perfect together. But now, it lacks engines. So make some new ones! Try to use something like a Technic gear instead, or a small wheel. Experiment, perfect, and make a awesome moc Smile.

-Aki, who is no longer very sad, worried, and in lots of pain Laughing!
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Post by pdragon27 Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:54 pm

Okay, okay. I said it was good... Well, I 'll say it again.... It is a good speeder. The shape is nice, its just the colors throw it off.
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Post by Rogue Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:54 pm

How about more tan pieces instead of blue?
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Post by -Aki- Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:55 pm

You said it was good? I don't think so. I checked your two posts in this topic, and they were just full of negative crap.
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Post by pdragon27 Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:55 pm

That'd be good. When I first saw that post, I thought you were commenting on your own moc... Razz

@Aki, what is the first thing I said? Hmmm?
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Post by -Aki- Thu Feb 19, 2009 8:59 pm

*Twiddles fingers*

Um... Ha! But you said "I said it was a good moc!", not "It's okay!"

*PD gives a unconvinced face*

Um... Look! Pie!

*Runs and hides*










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Post by pdragon27 Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:00 pm

Yeah, you better run! Before I go all Krayt Dragon on your a**! Razz
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Post by -Aki- Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:01 pm

Oh crap...

Anyway, let's set course for On Topic Island!
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Post by Rogue Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:33 pm

How do you like the new and improved version?
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Post by Comrade Faie Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:34 pm

The new one is great! I like the front!
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Post by Thunder-blade Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:47 pm

Much better! That tan looks great! This is perfect for fights in the desert!
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Post by bonehead Thu Feb 19, 2009 11:06 pm

The new one looks awesome! But that mega-blocks plate in the middle is like 👀
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Post by Bizzle Fri Feb 20, 2009 12:15 am

I like the new version way better.. But you could still improve it.
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Post by Zepher Fri Feb 20, 2009 12:40 am

This is a whole lots better. mixed colors never looks good, vast imporvement!
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Post by MuffinHobo Fri Feb 20, 2009 1:06 am

Looks much better with the tan.
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Post by xXBLACKDOOMXx Fri Feb 20, 2009 1:10 am

First off, i am ok with the fact that the first version was multi-colored. Sure it dosent look good but its a start and it gives you a general idea of what your going to turn it into in the future. Also i will agree that the speeder should be one person, beacuse it is to small to be two person.
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Post by Gerrard Mon Feb 23, 2009 1:04 pm

it is a lot better Rogue! The colors are better now and the design is cool.
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Post by Commander_Fox Mon Feb 23, 2009 2:59 pm

Cool speeder! The angles are good, and now the ccolors are a lot better. Good build!
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