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Episode 2: The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing

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Episode 2: The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing

Post by Zepher on Mon Mar 02, 2009 7:58 pm

Season 1
Episode 2
The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing














































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Re: Episode 2: The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing

Post by [Jay] on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:02 pm



Why the scout trooper skeleton?

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Post by Zepher on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:08 pm

He's the assain droid. You'll find our more about him in later episodes.
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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:10 pm



Gah, sorry, grammar Nazi instinct is too strong: You ought to have written "shouldn't have" and "could have", rather than of. Also, why did the droid at the beginning need to lock on? That was practically point-blank range. Laughing

Eh, apart from that, it was alright. Hard to make 'some clones get shot' compelling, but you did pretty well for it. Smile
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Post by Jens on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:20 pm

great so far!

I see you reused Lorman's place Wink
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Re: Episode 2: The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing

Post by Zepher on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:46 pm

The Jinja Ninja wrote:

Also, why did the droid at the beginning need to lock on? That was practically point-blank range. Laughing

Eh, apart from that, it was alright. Hard to make 'some clones get shot' compelling, but you did pretty well for it. Smile

This is just an intro to the invasion, I didn't want to make it compelling.

And I don't know. The droid needed to say something. Maybe becuase they were moving is why he had to lock on...

Jens wrote:great so far!

I see you reused Lorman's place Wink

Actually, those pics were taken before the AN day, his place was this reused Wink
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Re: Episode 2: The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing

Post by Sialboats on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:55 pm

Okay, plot works, makes sense. Fire effect was a little meh, there being too much and not properly perspectived. The scene of combat was okay, a little reused, but okay.

All in all, a standard comic Wink . Not too special, but not a flaming hunk of crap, either Razz .
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Post by Zepher on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:55 pm

Eh, I'll take what I can get from you Sials Wink
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Post by Sialboats on Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:56 pm

Zepher wrote:Eh, I'll take what I can get from you Sials Wink

I'm just giving my two credits, thats all Smile .
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Post by Clonecommando007 on Mon Mar 02, 2009 9:14 pm

That Twi'lek general is a real know-it-all isn't he? Razz I like the alley idea, by the way.

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Post by Felix42 on Mon Mar 02, 2009 9:23 pm

Sweet comic! I like the effects! That ship is... is AWESOME!!! To bad it got blown to pieces. I love the clone with the backpack. To bad he bit the dust. Well, awesome comic!! Cannot wait to see what happens next!
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Post by Zepher on Mon Mar 02, 2009 10:10 pm

Clonecommando007 wrote:That Twi'lek general is a real know-it-all isn't he? Razz I like the alley idea, by the way.

He's the main evil character. I'm going for a Joker/Know-it-all/Annoying Guy/Calm figure ffor him Wink

And thanks Felix! The ship is my "Iron Condor"
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Post by flare on Mon Mar 02, 2009 10:25 pm

great job so far! Sounds like this will be a good start to a whole seris. Which it is..... Wink
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Post by huntmaster on Mon Mar 02, 2009 10:30 pm

I forgot to coment great comic, Zeph. Smile
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Post by Gerrard on Mon Mar 02, 2009 11:11 pm

Wow, great comic Zeph! Couldn't stop reading it! The special effects are really good too!
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Post by Zepher on Tue Mar 03, 2009 1:12 am

Gerrard wrote:Wow, great comic Zeph! Couldn't stop reading it! The special effects are really good too!

Thanks. I hate working with flames, I try to pick a spot that they orginate from, so to form them into more of balls and shape them around objects.
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Post by Gerrard on Tue Mar 03, 2009 1:21 am

Zepher wrote:
Gerrard wrote:Wow, great comic Zeph! Couldn't stop reading it! The special effects are really good too!

Thanks. I hate working with flames, I try to pick a spot that they orginate from, so to form them into more of balls and shape them around objects.

Yeah, they are hard to make. Well, it still turned out good!
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Post by omicronleader on Tue Mar 03, 2009 1:45 am

Wow, this is great. Special effects are very good!!!
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Post by why on Tue Mar 03, 2009 2:51 am

Well, this actually was sort of bad. You skipped around too much and it was as if the clones become dead the second they get out of the alley.

6/10

Two other things:
Where the H*LL do you get the eggs!?
a lot of people say to when they need to say too and vice versa.
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Post by Zepher on Tue Mar 03, 2009 3:17 am

Sorry, skipped around to much? There was only one group of clones...
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Post by Uberlag on Tue Mar 03, 2009 3:38 am

Hmmm...
This isn't your best work, and the condor gets blown up after like 12 seconds?
It seemed too rushed because it jumped too much, like 'Oh were out here', 'Oh now were in an alley' 'Oh now were dead'.
And to be frank, I don't like the condor very much, its ok...but you could make a better ship.
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Post by Commander_Fox on Tue Mar 03, 2009 3:47 am

Woah, that's kinda confusing. Not really, it just jumps a lot. Was that droid taking the Condor out at point blank? Either way, good comic. Nice assassin droid!
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Post by Sialboats on Tue Mar 03, 2009 10:36 am

Commander_Fox wrote:Woah, that's kinda confusing. Not really, it just jumps a lot. Was that droid taking the Condor out at point blank? Either way, good comic. Nice assassin droid!

It didn't jump a lot Roll Eyes ... it jumps as much as my comics do, which isn't very much (two-three scene changes).
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Post by DarthPineapple on Tue Mar 03, 2009 11:01 am

Very nice special effects indeed. I like this one!
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Post by Zepher on Wed Mar 04, 2009 3:16 am

Uberlag wrote:Hmmm...
This isn't your best work, and the condor gets blown up after like 12 seconds?
It seemed too rushed because it jumped too much, like 'Oh were out here', 'Oh now were in an alley' 'Oh now were dead'.
And to be frank, I don't like the condor very much, its ok...but you could make a better ship.

I agree. The condor is fairly sucky. but I'm going to wait for much later to redo it. It was my first ship, and when I redo it, I plan to redo it completely and very nicely. It will get upgraded periodically throughout the series, but I also admit, it's certainly not my best.

As for it's jumps, I'm sorry, but I honestly don't understand that. Each slide takes place at tops 5 or so seconds after the one before it, other than the second and third, which have a slight time laspe. Sorry if that's confusing, next time i'll show them flying through space for a long time :scratch: !

Final topic. Battles, especially stealth missions, don't really last that long. They're fairly quick. It was only a skirmish. The real battle is yet to come, and that will take quite a few comics up, so don't worry. I know it was fast. It was really to introduce Vimpu and Old Papa, with some action, becuase, well, if they just sat around in a room introducing each other, I'd stop reading too.
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