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251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

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251st Legion #2: ''He Knows''

Post by PhiMa on Tue May 12, 2009 5:39 pm

Returning to.....the 251st Saga, this time, with part two, 'He Knows'

Day 1, Hour 21. Hyperion and his men have been scouting throughout the Warehouse, and believe to have found a lead according to a probe droid they sent out earlier that day.










About 15m further away, two lone clones discover something.





At the Clones Perimeter, Hyperion receives a message, while his men struggle to open the box.







Captain Hyperion regroups with the two scouts he sent out earlier, near a droid patrol...





















In the control Center of the Warehouse, the CIS Commander is about to make Hyperions life difficult





What happens next, you'll find out next time, in the 251st Saga...

So, I hope you liked it! Sorry about the bubbles being cut off at the right a bit, blame Servimg. Cut of like a whole piece of the picture. Give me hints, tips, and tell me where flaws are! Comments are appreciated.

And I'm not going to use SFX!!!


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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Bizzle on Tue May 12, 2009 5:44 pm

Likin the story line Phi. The one thing I would do is check for obstructions in the area before you take a pic. Like the second to last pic has a rather large hair in it...

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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by 80-0 on Tue May 12, 2009 6:39 pm

Bah, that's just a testament to the great definition his camera gets. Razz

Good comic PhiMa; I have to say I really like it! The camera is also well done.

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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by -Aki- on Tue May 12, 2009 7:13 pm

That was brilliant! Every aspect was perfect, from the story to the assasin droids on the wall Smile.
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Clonecommando007 on Tue May 12, 2009 8:58 pm

Oooooooo!


Dangit, there's a message in my cheerios again. Mad



Haha but ok, that was pretty good. There are a few parts where you need to cut out the backround, IE I saw an indy truck in one of the scenes etc, and you can put some more detail into this, but the suspense at the end was good. Smile

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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by RubbahBand on Tue May 12, 2009 9:27 pm

That was a very good comic. Although I would capitalize things like Commander since it gives the ranking. If you have any photo editing systems I would use them to make your gun fire. So overall good work. Smile
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Gerrard on Tue May 12, 2009 9:56 pm

Nice, I like this one a lot better than you last one. Pics were good and it was done well.
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Zepher on Tue May 12, 2009 10:43 pm

The stories a good war story. It's not really complicated, but as far as a bang ban, killy killy story goes, it's one of the best. Simple cast, there's only one real important character on the good side, and one on the bad side! Nice work!
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Sialboats on Tue May 12, 2009 10:48 pm

Simple plot, simple characters, simple set, simple objectives.


It's one of the better, to use Zeph's way of putting it "shooty-shooty-bang-bang" comics I've seen. It's certainly a good start, and if we can seduce you to the GIMP side, there shall be no one to oppose us Wink !
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by CloneCommandoXion on Tue May 12, 2009 10:59 pm

Great comic! Smile I liked the angles of the pic's! Poor echo though, that shot must have hurt! Razz
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Blast on Tue May 12, 2009 11:56 pm

That was awesome. It has a good story line.
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by PhiMa on Wed May 13, 2009 12:02 pm

@Bizzle: Alright, I'll watch out next time.

@CC007: Yes...I need to pick up some more big gray baseplates to fix that.

@Anomanzer: I'm using proper English. Commander, seeing as it is not a name, town, location, or at the beginning a sentence is not supposed to be capatalized.

@Sial: When I start my second Comic series after I finish this one, 'Tale of two Marines' will probably have GIMP. I'll have to see how it works. But I want to keep this one pure for now.

Thank you for all the comments!
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Thunder-blade on Wed May 13, 2009 4:54 pm

Wow! I love it PhiMa! It's simple and well thought-out!

Just add some more detail to the set and you're done!

One little nitpick to this though; I don't think a Commander would just "steal" some supplies that's needed for someone else... not standard protocol. Wink
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by PhiMa on Wed May 13, 2009 10:16 pm

Thunder-blade wrote:Wow! I love it PhiMa! It's simple and well thought-out!

Just add some more detail to the set and you're done!

One little nitpick to this though; I don't think a Commander would just "steal" some supplies that's needed for someone else... not standard protocol. Wink

The warehouse has been abandoned. It's never going to be delivered. And the CIS control it.
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by hpoz on Sat May 23, 2009 4:09 pm

Great! Just great! I can't wait to see how this will turn out! I love the list; "chainguns, floodlights, macrobinoculars..."

On the same note but perhaps off topic; what are the flag-like helmet attachments for?

Again, Great work! Poor Echo, though.
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Thunder-blade on Sat May 23, 2009 4:46 pm

/facepalm

They're called antennae. And I thought everyone's favorite ARC trooper in CW was Rex...
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by MuffinHobo on Sat May 23, 2009 4:49 pm

Thunder-blade wrote:/facepalm

They're called antennae. And I thought everyone's favorite ARC trooper in CW was Rex...
Facepalm to you my friend because they are range finders not antennae.
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by Thunder-blade on Sat May 23, 2009 4:51 pm

I-

bu-

Wh--

I was trying to tell him in layman's terms!! Razz
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Re: 251st Legion #2: 'He Knows'

Post by hpoz on Sat May 30, 2009 11:56 pm

MuffinHobo wrote:
Thunder-blade wrote:/facepalm

They're called antennae. And I thought everyone's favorite ARC trooper in CW was Rex...
Facepalm to you my friend because they are range finders not antennae.
That's exactly what I thought they were.
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