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704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

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704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Alpha on Thu May 28, 2009 2:16 am



A short comic to start my comics up again, no real exciting plot, no real exciting action, just your regular dialouge and action. Oh, and you get a plain space background until I actually motivate myself to make one. Embarassed Wink Razz

























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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Jens on Thu May 28, 2009 7:57 am

Aha! That's what you needed the Hazmat shelter for.


A real good cliffhanger IMO, plus it really shows what kind of guy Alpha is, so really good character development.
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Gerrard on Thu May 28, 2009 12:35 pm

Great special effect and even though it was short, it was well put together. Good plotline and action and it still kept me interested!
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Sialboats on Thu May 28, 2009 2:06 pm

Gerrard wrote:Great special effect and even though it was short, it was well put together. Good plotline and action and it still kept me interested!

I'm agreeing with everything but his first clause. It was splendid character development, but the effects were SERIOUSLY lacking. The sparks weren't properly placed, the blood didn't seem right, the shake seemed over-emphasized....

However, I have to give you kudos for improving your background crop Wink !
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Alpha on Thu May 28, 2009 2:46 pm

Haha, yeah, I should've taken a couple loose cables and had sparks coming out.

And I guess I am a bit gory. Razz

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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Sialboats on Thu May 28, 2009 3:46 pm

Alpha wrote:And I guess I am a bit gory. Razz

No, I mean it doesn't seem to come out in a natural way Wink .
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Thunder-blade on Thu May 28, 2009 5:59 pm

Story was good, but the shake was WAY overdone!
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by foxrex101 on Thu May 28, 2009 6:07 pm

Wow nice Alpha! I love the special effects and like TB said way to much shake. Overall a pretty decent cominc.
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Zepher on Thu May 28, 2009 9:44 pm

Character development was good! Try a little harder to show and not tell, but over-all it was nicely done. Sets could... use work? Really, they're kind of boring. While my Ingration may of been too exciting for you, all gray, and all gray studs at that, are so boring it's insane.
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Alpha on Thu May 28, 2009 9:46 pm

Yeah, I could've thrown in some Dark Red and Light Bley, but I rushed this, and there wasn't much thought put into this, as this is just a boot up.

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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Zepher on Thu May 28, 2009 9:53 pm

I'm going to quote Sialboats, loosely, here. Never produce something your not happy with. Everything should be considered your best.
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Commando Shade on Thu May 28, 2009 9:54 pm

Wow.
2 things.

1. The blood looks like some sort of ooze. It was way too congealed.

2. Don't shake the words so much. I had to tilt the screen to read it.

Other than that, I can't wait for the next comic. Smile

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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Superperson on Thu May 28, 2009 11:55 pm

Wow! I like your figures. Also I love the comic. Hola Wow!
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Re: 704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

Post by Jedi Joe on Fri May 29, 2009 6:57 am

The shaking of the words looks like poop, although everything else is awesome! Smile
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