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704th Tactical Strike #8 - Class 8

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Post by Alpha Thu May 28, 2009 2:16 am

Previous Episodes

#1 - Night Ops.
#2 - A Larger Perspective
#3 - Repercussions
#4 - Time to Die, Jedi...
#5 - Old Friends
#6 - No BDZs, but...
#7 - Through the Fire and Flames
#8 Class 8


A short comic to start my comics up again, no real exciting plot, no real exciting action, just your regular dialouge and action. Oh, and you get a plain space background until I actually motivate myself to make one. Embarassed Wink Razz

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Post by Jens Thu May 28, 2009 7:57 am

Aha! That's what you needed the Hazmat shelter for.


A real good cliffhanger IMO, plus it really shows what kind of guy Alpha is, so really good character development.
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Post by Gerrard Thu May 28, 2009 12:35 pm

Great special effect and even though it was short, it was well put together. Good plotline and action and it still kept me interested!
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Post by Sialboats Thu May 28, 2009 2:06 pm

Gerrard wrote:Great special effect and even though it was short, it was well put together. Good plotline and action and it still kept me interested!

I'm agreeing with everything but his first clause. It was splendid character development, but the effects were SERIOUSLY lacking. The sparks weren't properly placed, the blood didn't seem right, the shake seemed over-emphasized....

However, I have to give you kudos for improving your background crop Wink !
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Post by Alpha Thu May 28, 2009 2:46 pm

Haha, yeah, I should've taken a couple loose cables and had sparks coming out.

And I guess I am a bit gory. Razz
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Post by Sialboats Thu May 28, 2009 3:46 pm

Alpha wrote:And I guess I am a bit gory. Razz

No, I mean it doesn't seem to come out in a natural way Wink .
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Post by Thunder-blade Thu May 28, 2009 5:59 pm

Story was good, but the shake was WAY overdone!
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Post by foxrex101 Thu May 28, 2009 6:07 pm

Wow nice Alpha! I love the special effects and like TB said way to much shake. Overall a pretty decent cominc.
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Post by Zepher Thu May 28, 2009 9:44 pm

Character development was good! Try a little harder to show and not tell, but over-all it was nicely done. Sets could... use work? Really, they're kind of boring. While my Ingration may of been too exciting for you, all gray, and all gray studs at that, are so boring it's insane.
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Post by Alpha Thu May 28, 2009 9:46 pm

Yeah, I could've thrown in some Dark Red and Light Bley, but I rushed this, and there wasn't much thought put into this, as this is just a boot up.
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Post by Zepher Thu May 28, 2009 9:53 pm

I'm going to quote Sialboats, loosely, here. Never produce something your not happy with. Everything should be considered your best.
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Post by Commando Shade Thu May 28, 2009 9:54 pm

Wow.
2 things.

1. The blood looks like some sort of ooze. It was way too congealed.

2. Don't shake the words so much. I had to tilt the screen to read it.

Other than that, I can't wait for the next comic. Smile
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Post by Superperson Thu May 28, 2009 11:55 pm

Wow! I like your figures. Also I love the comic. Hola Wow!
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Post by Jedi Joe Fri May 29, 2009 6:57 am

The shaking of the words looks like poop, although everything else is awesome! Smile
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