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541st Vendetta #11: Situational Irony

Post by Sialboats on Sun Jun 07, 2009 4:44 pm

Day two of the Ansion Invasion begins with the return of several old characters (so if you can't remember back to the begining of the series...), and the Purist version of Senior Clone Marshal Shiko (GAH, I just noticed he's not wearing a Sniper Rifle Shocked ).

An average comic (with one spelling error), but I've got some nifty tricks I'm planning to use in later comics so you can finally have a epic-scale battle Wink .

































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Post by -Aki- on Sun Jun 07, 2009 4:51 pm

Brilliant! It's good to see that woman didn't die, and Shiko was VERY cool.
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Post by lieutenanatgalle44 on Sun Jun 07, 2009 4:56 pm

Shiko kinda looks like a samuri.
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Re: 541st Vendetta #11: Situational Irony

Post by The Jinja Ninja on Sun Jun 07, 2009 4:56 pm

Shiko's grey.

Razz

The rest of it wasn't bad, but definitely not one of your best. The Equinox guy's language is particularly weird. Why does he go from completely calm to RARGH I HAET TEH REPUBLIK in the space of one panel? Plus, the thought bubbles weren't a particularly good effect, nor a technique that was really necessary - some better dialogue could have conveyed her thoughts without us actually seeing them. Oh, and IMO you overdid the fire a tad. The establishing shot on Corellia was nice enough, though. Good lighting to match the background.

Now, how are you going to portray Akrah?


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Post by Jens on Sun Jun 07, 2009 4:57 pm

My (yours now) BA again! Wow this thing looks


Very nice plot development, I like the rank respecting clone.


Keep them coming!
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Post by Comrade Faie on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:04 pm

I really digged this one!

The soldier and woman part was mildly funny. It could be a good relationship, that of course ends with her killing him. Wink

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Re: 541st Vendetta #11: Situational Irony

Post by Sialboats on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:07 pm

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Shiko's grey.

Razz

The rest of it wasn't bad, but definitely not one of your best. The Equinox guy's language is particularly weird. Why does he go from completely calm to RARGH I HAET TEH REPUBLIK in the space of one panel? Plus, the thought bubbles weren't a particularly good effect, nor a technique that was really necessary - some better dialogue could have conveyed her thoughts without us actually seeing them. Oh, and IMO you overdid the fire a tad. The establishing shot on Corellia was nice enough, though. Good lighting to match the background.

Now, how are you going to portray Akrah?

He is? I never noticed that in the Bio. I just assumed their armor was painted to the legion colors Wink .

Pent up anger, and trying to keep the storyboard a bit more condensed. I didn't execute it all that well. The thought-bubbles were just a way of guiding along the reader who may not remember our Red-Headed friend, and that she was aiding the Republic and is now caught behind enemy lines. The fire... yeah, just trying to dust off that effect. Haven't really done that since Chronicles, so I'm preparing for another night fight Wink .
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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:20 pm

Sialboats wrote:He is? I never noticed that in the Bio. I just assumed their armor was painted to the legion colors. Wink
Shiko's the leader of the 815th Corps, not the 265th Legion. Razz J4ke made some decals for him a while ago, but they've vanished from his Flickr now. I'll ask him about them when he gets online.
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Post by Sialboats on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:21 pm

The Jinja Ninja wrote:
Sialboats wrote:He is? I never noticed that in the Bio. I just assumed their armor was painted to the legion colors. Wink
Shiko's the leader of the 815th Corps, not the 265th Legion. Razz J4ke made some decals for him a while ago, but they've vanished from his Flickr now. I'll ask him about them when he gets online.

But that doesn't make sense... just grey. Look at our bloody Corps logo Wink .


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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:24 pm

That's just 'cause orange rocks. Grey is, uh... tactical. Yeah, see, tactical, that's in the corps name. Razz

CC used the decals on a clone once, I'll see if he's got them.
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Re: 541st Vendetta #11: Situational Irony

Post by Alpha on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:24 pm

Introducing the Corps leaders, eh?

Can't say it wasn't bad, Tasche and a Equinox bastard meeting up, then a reintroduction of McCulbert, who's meeting your Corps leaders. Nice one. Wink

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Re: 541st Vendetta #11: Situational Irony

Post by Jens on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:29 pm

The Jinja Ninja wrote:
Sialboats wrote:He is? I never noticed that in the Bio. I just assumed their armor was painted to the legion colors. Wink
Shiko's the leader of the 815th Corps, not the 265th Legion. Razz J4ke made some decals for him a while ago, but they've vanished from his Flickr now. I'll ask him about them when he gets online.

Oh I remember them! Was it that grey camo clone trooper with your corps logo on?
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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Sun Jun 07, 2009 5:30 pm

Yup. PM'd CC a moment ago, should have a reply soon. Smile

Anyhoo, back on-topic...
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Post by Clonecommando007 on Sun Jun 07, 2009 6:07 pm

Shiko. Doesn't sound like a very respectable character. Not nice at all! Great plot and backround, though it's obviously from coruscant. Razz

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Post by 667thLegion on Sun Jun 07, 2009 7:41 pm

Very nice comic once again, but the lack of action left a big hole... Oh well, still an nice comic! Smile
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Post by why on Wed Jun 10, 2009 3:54 pm

Great comic! The only bad parts was, like TJN said, he went from normal to: OMFGIHATEREPUBLIC! Although I think you should make more of these character proggressions in the future, Wink
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Re: 541st Vendetta #11: Situational Irony

Post by Zepher on Wed Jun 10, 2009 9:16 pm

All these people want is action action action! It's soooo annoying! Ever heard of plot development!

This one was fairly good! I really like the re-intro of Red Head, and the Captain. My least favorite part by far were the thought bubbles, and within those my least favorite one was "I'll need allies so I'd better befriend him". You say that I sometimes make my dialouge sound fake... and that was very... very fake.
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Post by Sialboats on Wed Jun 10, 2009 9:24 pm

Zepher wrote:All these people want is action action action! It's soooo annoying! Ever heard of plot development!

This one was fairly good! I really like the re-intro of Red Head, and the Captain. My least favorite part by far were the thought bubbles, and within those my least favorite one was "I'll need allies so I'd better befriend him". You say that I sometimes make my dialouge sound fake... and that was very... very fake.

I know! I was aweful, but how else could I easily convey that sentiment without half the crowd who doesn't understand who Red Head is, where she is, or what she's doing, going "LOLWUT"?
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Post by Commander Four on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:34 pm

Ah....the great quality of Sailboat's (yes I just said you're a watercraft Razz) amazing 541st comics. I loved the good ole' days when we only had about 210 users.
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Post by Sialboats on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:41 pm

Commander Four wrote:I loved the good ole' days when we only had about 210 users.

I mean no disrespect... but, er... who are you?
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Post by Alpha on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:43 pm

Old member, the one who started the whole 'Guild Club' joke.

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Post by Sialboats on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:44 pm

Alpha wrote:Old member, the one who started the whole 'Guild Club' joke.

Aaaah! Now I remember hearing of that. So he's back, and hopefully not as much as a noob Razz ?
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Post by Commander Four on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:45 pm

Alpha wrote:Old member, the one who started the whole 'Guild Club' joke.
Yes...that was me. I kept saying "I WANTZ GUILD CLUBZ" not like that but I said Guild Club instead of Guild. Also when did that become a joke? Was it while I was taking my long vaction from CABG?
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Post by Zepher on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:46 pm

Sialboats wrote:
Zepher wrote:All these people want is action action action! It's soooo annoying! Ever heard of plot development!

This one was fairly good! I really like the re-intro of Red Head, and the Captain. My least favorite part by far were the thought bubbles, and within those my least favorite one was "I'll need allies so I'd better befriend him". You say that I sometimes make my dialouge sound fake... and that was very... very fake.

I know! I was aweful, but how else could I easily convey that sentiment without half the crowd who doesn't understand who Red Head is, where she is, or what she's doing, going "LOLWUT"?

Write your comics or the smart people. Screw the stupid ones. That's what I do. If you dumb things down, then the smart people a.k.a. the people who matter won't enjoy it, but if you smarten things up things then it will give you at least an audience that you want to impress being impressed, even if it's a smaller audience.
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Post by Sialboats on Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:49 pm

Zepher wrote:
Write your comics or the smart people. Screw the stupid ones. That's what I do. If you dumb things down, then the smart people a.k.a. the people who matter won't enjoy it, but if you smarten things up things then it will give you at least an audience that you want to impress being impressed, even if it's a smaller audience.

I normally don't cater to the dullards, but I felt I had to. I don't want to make it too esoteric.
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