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541st Vendetta #14: Zerg

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Post by Sialboats Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:30 pm

Okay, it's a day late, but my computer wasn't functioning as it should've yesterday, which threw me behind a little. I actually did a little shifting around, as far as plot is concerned, with this installment. Scenes were deleted, premises were changed, scenes were added, so forth. I think it turned out okay. Not GOOD, but okay. Average.

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Post by Rogue Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:36 pm

He he he, I see Sial in the reflection!
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Post by Darman Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:36 pm

Brilliant! The story line is going along extremely well and the cliff hanger was very nice touch. A toast!
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Post by -Aki- Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:40 pm

That was great! I loved the charge, and the mishmashed slide showing the battle.
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Post by The Jinja Ninja Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:42 pm

Huh, this one was better than I was expecting from your opening lines. Simple plot, the tactics were conveyed better than usual, and the octuptarra looked really sweet. I'd say you could work on making the dialogue more natural, but other than tha-...

Garrgh!

Sweet Jesus, I just understood the title. Holy crap, that's... That's just... Oww, my brain.
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Post by Darman Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:46 pm

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Huh, this one was better than I was expecting from your opening lines. Simple plot, the tactics were conveyed better than usual, and the octuptarra looked really sweet. I'd say you could work on making the dialogue more natural, but other than tha-...

Garrgh!

Sweet Jesus, I just understood the title. Holy crap, that's... That's just... Oww, my brain.


Movie reference I am guessing or something else? You got me wondering now.
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Post by Sialboats Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:50 pm

Darman-C19 wrote:
The Jinja Ninja wrote:Huh, this one was better than I was expecting from your opening lines. Simple plot, the tactics were conveyed better than usual, and the octuptarra looked really sweet. I'd say you could work on making the dialogue more natural, but other than tha-...

Garrgh!

Sweet Jesus, I just understood the title. Holy crap, that's... That's just... Oww, my brain.


Movie reference I am guessing or something else? You got me wondering now.

I based it off of a term from gaming, Zerging. A Zerg Rush came from an old RTS, where a player spammed a unit called a Zerg and then rushed his foe's base. It's now become a term to signify rushing into a location, dying, respawning, and then rushing back in, in an attempt to win it over.



And Jinja, that has to be the best review I've ever had from you Shocked .


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Post by Darman Mon Jul 20, 2009 6:53 pm

Sialboats wrote:
Darman-C19 wrote:
The Jinja Ninja wrote:Huh, this one was better than I was expecting from your opening lines. Simple plot, the tactics were conveyed better than usual, and the octuptarra looked really sweet. I'd say you could work on making the dialogue more natural, but other than tha-...

Garrgh!

Sweet Jesus, I just understood the title. Holy crap, that's... That's just... Oww, my brain.


Movie reference I am guessing or something else? You got me wondering now.

I based it off of a term from gaming, Zerging. A Zerg Rush came from an old RTS, where a player spammed a unit called a Zerg and then rushed his foe's base. It's now become a term to signify rushing into a location, dying, respawning, and then rushing back in, in an attempt to win it over.



And Jinja, that has to be the best review I've ever had from you Shocked .


Razz

It just occurred to me that that's what a lot of halo noobs do. Shocked Also you just gave me a idea for a Moc. A toast! For the idea!
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Post by Jens Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:09 pm

Oh snap! He fell for the trap!

But no one would could ever kill one of most badass commanders. Wink
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Post by Zepher Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:21 pm

Sialboats wrote:
Darman-C19 wrote:
The Jinja Ninja wrote:Huh, this one was better than I was expecting from your opening lines. Simple plot, the tactics were conveyed better than usual, and the octuptarra looked really sweet. I'd say you could work on making the dialogue more natural, but other than tha-...

Garrgh!

Sweet Jesus, I just understood the title. Holy crap, that's... That's just... Oww, my brain.


Movie reference I am guessing or something else? You got me wondering now.

I based it off of a term from gaming, Zerging. A Zerg Rush came from an old RTS, where a player spammed a unit called a Zerg and then rushed his foe's base. It's now become a term to signify rushing into a location, dying, respawning, and then rushing back in, in an attempt to win it over.



And Jinja, that has to be the best review I've ever had from you Shocked .


Razz

The unit wasn't called a Zerg, it was called a Zergling. The race that you played as was Zerg. It's from my favorite game of all time, Starcraft.

I haven't read the comic yet, I wanted to see if you mentioned Starcraft in your opening post, to see if you have played the game.
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Post by The Jinja Ninja Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:34 pm

Jens wrote:Oh snap! He fell for the trap!

But no one would could ever kill one of most badass commanders.
Which is why it'll be a complete shock when Ied gets killed in a couple of issues.



...Whoops. Wink
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Post by -Aki- Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:46 pm

*Jaw drop to feet*

You serious?
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Post by PhiMa Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:51 pm

-Aki- wrote:*Jaw drop to feet*

You serious?

Of course not.

*Puts hands around Aki's ears*

Jinj! That's like telling a little child Santa Claus doesn't Exist...I mean...oh Ship. Razz
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Post by -Aki- Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:53 pm

*Glares at Phima*

In which case, I predict Trek will become the new commander.
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Post by Zepher Mon Jul 20, 2009 7:57 pm

Guys, Jinja is just making stuff up. Razz

I liked this one quite a lot Sial. It was a fight, but a better one than usual, and it's nice to see the story really going somewhere, at least this fight could lead to more story. Though I hope Ied uses that sword at least a little bit more after the deal that Turkai made out of it.
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Post by Commando Shade Tue Jul 21, 2009 1:25 am

Better than I was hoping for! The GIMPing for the swords and the electrostaffs was well done.
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Post by Alpha Tue Jul 21, 2009 1:29 am

Excellent as always, arming your regular footsoldiers and Armored Elite (Whatever they're called) with ElectroStaffs/Poles and Vibroswords was quite unusual, but pulled off well. Special effects are always good, plot is developing.
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Post by Delta 1608 Tue Jul 21, 2009 9:36 pm

This was great, not ok, but great. It had a wonderful ending, with a nice suspense, and a flowing storyline. Great job, can't wait for the next one. Smile
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Post by Ham701 Tue Jul 21, 2009 10:20 pm

Doesn't ANYONE get the reference in this comic? Does Cemetery Ridge(I think) ring a bell to you? When Joshua Lawrence Chamberlain's troops ran out of ammo after 4 waves of Southern troops charging up the ridge, he ordered them to fix bayonets and charge the enemy. You know I'm right Sial Wink.
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Post by Sialboats Tue Jul 21, 2009 10:30 pm

Ham701 wrote:Doesn't ANYONE get the reference in this comic? Does Cemetery Ridge(I think) ring a bell to you? When Joshua Lawrence Chamberlain's troops ran out of ammo after 4 waves of Southern troops charging up the ridge, he ordered them to fix bayonets and charge the enemy. You know I'm right Sial Wink.

That you are! Finally, someone who knows their American History Razz ! And it was Little Round Top Wink , but just the fact that you referenced Gettysburg made my day.
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Post by Ham701 Tue Jul 21, 2009 10:32 pm

Yeah I was thinking its was Little Round Top, but it was a 50-50 guess. And as to History, that's my middle name. Razz
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Post by Sialboats Tue Jul 21, 2009 10:34 pm

Hey - we have the same middle name Razz ! It's currently competing with my love of my language as far as academic subject matter is concerned.
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