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Rothana's Pride

Post by CloneCommandoXion on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:36 am

This will be the flagship for my legion. I'm a little disapointed on how the pictures came out. Anyways it's a mini version of the ship because I tried to build a larger version but that just kinda...failed. Laughing So here it is, I don't really have much to say about it. The bridge I thought was an original idea...If it isn't let me know.

I hope you like it.

All C&C welcome. Smile
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Post by 45thHawkBattalion on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:41 am

That is the most original Flagship I have seen yet. By the way nice detailing.
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Post by someguy577 on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:47 am

So, I love it from the back to the middle. Just because the back is slanting I would like the front to be slightly slanted as well. Still it is really looking nice!
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by 11_seconds_older on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:48 am

Ok, you want my opinion, here it is,

The bridges, How exactly is that original? It's like the sam design on most venators, two bridges spaced apart.
The back, looks like a total mess, To many exposed parts.
The front, all it looks like is a really flat venator.

It's not super original, as it looks like your where just trying to make a venator, and stuffed up.
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Post by CloneCommandoXion on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:48 am

I thought the angled plates would give it the illusion of it being slanted...
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by CloneCommandoXion on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:51 am

11_seconds_older wrote:Ok, you want my opinion, here it is,

The bridges, How exactly is that original? It's like the sam design on most venators, two bridges spaced apart.
The back, looks like a total mess, To many exposed parts.
The front, all it looks like is a really flat venator.

It's not super original, as it looks like your where just trying to make a venator, and stuffed up.

First I appologise for the double post, what I meant by original was in my specific design of the two bridges. I didn't mean I was making a completely different starship, it's supposed to be a venator.

DO NOT DOUBLE POST!

Is that clear enough for you? -TJN
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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Thu Aug 27, 2009 8:28 am

Wait, so is a Venator or isn't it? Frankly, it looks like a Venator with the 'wings' moved back, so it's too similar to be anything else, but it's too different to really be a Venator. Also, it's pretty ugly, going from flat at the front to vertical at the bridge to I-don't-know-what-you-were-thinking at the back.
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Post by Sialboats on Thu Aug 27, 2009 9:56 am

It's flat, painfully flat. You didn't add enough layers of plates so that it would look like it increased in height. The bridge has got a gaping hole in it, and the portion aft of the bridge is just strangely built. The coloration is nice, and the under-panel greebles are interesting, but...

...it really isn't very strong of a MOC, Xion.
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Post by Clonecommando007 on Thu Aug 27, 2009 12:58 pm

It really looks like a venator that went through a junkyard. It's not really original at all. If you're gonna make an 'original' flagship, add some wacky different things. Also it is really jagged, alot of those pieces look tacked on. This needs more work and different inspiration I think.

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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by Gerrard on Thu Aug 27, 2009 2:26 pm

Everything just looks so "blech". The middle is too skinny nd covered with random objects, the whole thing needs a bit of work. Wink
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Post by Thunder-blade on Thu Aug 27, 2009 4:17 pm

Looks like the venator was cut in several pieces, and re-put together...

Try making it less Venator-like.
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by pdragon27 on Thu Aug 27, 2009 5:43 pm

I think I'd describe this as "Bothawui Pride scrapped and put back together."
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by Brandon9 on Thu Aug 27, 2009 5:45 pm

As others have pointed out it needs work. Also I would like to say the bridge seems to far forward, maby you should move it back a little bit. Smile Fordo Yo!
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by CloneCommandoXion on Thu Aug 27, 2009 7:25 pm

I thought I'd give the venator a try but obviously you guys really dislike it. So I'll try to make a completely new type of star destroyer. Smile
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Post by Jedi Joe on Thu Aug 27, 2009 10:03 pm

Yea, it looks like a distorted Venator. Not that original.
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by CommanderNexu on Thu Aug 27, 2009 11:00 pm

You have the back all bulky and the front all flat, you should fix that. Other than that good job.
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by CloneCommandoXion on Sat Aug 29, 2009 3:19 am

I'm coming out with a V.2, it will be a combination of an acclamator, eclipse, and super star destroyer plus my own ideas too. Smile
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Re: Rothana's Pride

Post by Delta 1608 on Sun Aug 30, 2009 3:10 am

That is the awesomeness original mini capital ship ever. All Hail!
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