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Post by Zepher Sun May 16, 2010 12:42 am

Yes I know what you're all thinking: "Oh no, ANOTHER Zepher comic?!"

Well shove it, since I like story telling.

Besides, I've made my life easier on this one in a number of ways. First off, this will not be weekly. Bi-weekly will be more likely, but you may get it more often or less often depending on the time of year and how much work I have.

Secondly, I've not trapped myself in a universe like Star Wars. I get to make up this univerese, and that makes me, as a story-teller, much happier. I don't have to worry about as much, and I have way more fun this way, and if you're doing something you like, chances are you work on it harder and more.

Thirdly, I've actually read some comics now. I know how they work, so I can bring you much nicer stories now.

Anyway, enough of that. Enjoy Issue 1 of a 36 issue story!

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Post by Persian Prince Sun May 16, 2010 12:57 am

Shocked Can't wait to see the rest of this Zeph!
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Post by Guest Sun May 16, 2010 1:23 am

This looks great, good job on it!
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Post by Delta 1608 Sun May 16, 2010 2:25 am

This looks awesome! Can wait for the next episode.
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Post by Zepher Mon May 17, 2010 4:16 am

Thank you everyone! I finished the scripting for the rest of the comic tonight, and all I can say is that it is twisty, tricky and awesome as hell, at least, I think it is, and I'm so excitied to keep working on it.
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Post by 80-0 Mon May 17, 2010 3:39 pm

Not just any alien, THE Alien.

This looks to be interesting; I look forward to finding out more about "The Fall"... DUN DUN DUNNNNN!
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Post by Guest Mon May 17, 2010 7:06 pm

I can't wait for the other 35 issues! It looks great!
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Post by 667thLegion Mon May 17, 2010 8:43 pm

it was good, very nice cliff hanger, but I change some of the white text when there is white backgrounds, I hate straining at the screen to tell what it said. Wink
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Post by Guest Mon May 17, 2010 9:13 pm

667thLegion wrote:it was good, very nice cliff hanger, but I change some of the white text when there is white backgrounds, I hate straining at the screen to tell what it said. Wink

Yeah, having black text would be much better.
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Post by Knight Mon May 17, 2010 9:17 pm

I loved it! The story kept my attention the whole time, and I can't wait to see the character development! Keep it up! Thumbs up
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Post by Ham701 Mon May 17, 2010 9:36 pm

I absolutely LOVE how you made it all grainy, like it was a video, taped before the accident, and then found.
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Post by Guest Mon May 17, 2010 9:57 pm

Ham701 wrote:I absolutely LOVE how you made it all grainy, like it was a video, taped before the accident, and then found.

Yeah, the whole thing was great.
I think the people's names should be given, so we know who everyone is.
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Post by Zepher Mon May 17, 2010 10:57 pm

Okay, so adressing a number of issues. The only place that I think the white narration was hard to see was the page before Elliot started announcing the Alien, and I tried black there too, but due to picture composition and space, it read even worse (black capes up top and black shits down bottom.)

The grainyness at the beginning, along with the washed out colors, fit into the bigger story for a major reason. Everything will be explained, and there are clues to everything that happens in the story previously in the story. That's the beauty of having everything scripted before hand, something I've never done before!

As for names, you have two, and get the other two important ones in the next issue. This is only the firsst 18 pages of a much greater story, which is now, just since you folks are so gosh darn beautiful, 38 issues long.
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Post by Alpha Beta Thu May 20, 2010 12:14 am

^Thirty-eight issues, wow, how often will you make them, like one every week?

EDIT:Nevermind, but it still looks like you have some work ahead of you.
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Post by Troopa Daisy Thu May 20, 2010 1:17 am

This wasn't bad. This is how most stories are normally started. Smile
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Post by bl*c Thu May 20, 2010 2:42 am

Wow. Shocked

Very cool, nice beginning to the series.
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Post by Rabid Squirrel Thu May 20, 2010 11:56 pm

Wow! This is great! You are so good at comics!
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Post by Jedi Joe Fri May 21, 2010 1:50 am

Great work! Definitely more interesting than your clone comics. Thumbs up
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