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Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Zepher on Wed Jun 30, 2010 1:38 am

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Editor's Note: Mostly happy with this episode. Not 100%, there were some things I tried and didn't like, and a lot of things I tried and DID like. I won't tell which is which, since generally if i do so the "critics" just repeat that back to me. So, tell me what YOU thought was good and what YOU thought was bad.

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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Troopa Daisy on Wed Jun 30, 2010 1:49 am

Wow, I really like this plot, keep up with that! Smile

However, what I didn't like was the white words on white bricks/legs/torso. That made it kind of made the words somewhat hard to read once in a while. Very minor of course, but I thought I'd just point that out.

Well done though, I'm really loving your comics! Smile
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by bl*c on Wed Jun 30, 2010 1:55 am

I like how you gave us a clue that something was going to happen, that 'Run. Run.' thing was what really kept me reading.

The sudden dim when things got suspicious and when the guns were fired was a nice touch. Or was that a coincidence? Razz
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Post by Troopa Daisy on Wed Jun 30, 2010 1:56 am

Wait, this means that Elliot and Katharine are dead right? Wink
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by bl*c on Wed Jun 30, 2010 2:10 am

Yup, they kicked the bucket, all 30 of them.
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by eclipsegrafx on Wed Jun 30, 2010 2:23 am

Other then those beams of light..(what were they?) I think everything was perfect.

Nice job. Love the story!
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Rabid Squirrel on Wed Jun 30, 2010 3:02 am

I love the quote.
An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind.

I'll have to remember it.
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Zepher on Wed Jun 30, 2010 3:08 am

bl*c wrote:I like how you gave us a clue that something was going to happen, that 'Run. Run.' thing was what really kept me reading.

The sudden dim when things got suspicious and when the guns were fired was a nice touch. Or was that a coincidence? Razz

I've played with colors balance a lot in these six episodes. That is not by chance.

eclipsegrafx wrote:Other then those beams of light..(what were they?) I think everything was perfect.

Nice job. Love the story!

They were just that, beans of light. Concentrated bulbs... it was an effect... yeah, they weren't great Razz
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Hazard with a Glove on Wed Jun 30, 2010 4:49 am

I really loved this one Zepher! Good job!
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Alpha Beta on Thu Jul 01, 2010 12:08 am

Love the twist, if I had to guess, the men where either mercenaries or soldiers working for the government to "tie up loose ends", now the main character will either go after Jesus or find the woman who confronted him. Love the comic, the only thing I would change is the guns, they are too basic, use BA!
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Ham701 on Fri Jul 02, 2010 10:02 pm

Half-Life, anyone? Government soldiers come to kill all the scientists at a secret facility? I like where this is going.
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by Zepher on Sat Jul 03, 2010 7:57 pm

Alpha Beta wrote:Love the twist, if I had to guess, the men where either mercenaries or soldiers working for the government to "tie up loose ends", now the main character will either go after Jesus or find the woman who confronted him. Love the comic, the only thing I would change is the guns, they are too basic, use BA!

I don't use BA. I will vary the guns a bit, but since I have so many factions lined up for this comic, I need to try to use different guns for each. I gave this group chunky and heavier guns since I felt it was more serious and kind of solid, I guess. Concrete. No messing around.

Ham701 wrote:Half-Life, anyone? Government soldiers come to kill all the scientists at a secret facility? I like where this is going.

Never played it. Sorry.
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Re: Making The Whole World Blind

Post by stormtroopertj on Sat Jul 03, 2010 8:40 pm

Epic storyline, loving the plot!
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