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10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

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10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Gerrard on Wed Aug 11, 2010 4:53 pm

So this is probably my best MOC to date. Razz

But I wouldn't mind getting some feeback on this. I know their are some things to fix but that's what C@C is for! Thanks!

10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter



Better look at the wings.


Better look at the center of the starfighter.


Weapons on top.


Double wings, hence the "D-Wing."


Bottom of the wing.


Center of the bottom.


Picture of back.



Thanks and enjoy!
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Troopa Daisy on Wed Aug 11, 2010 4:55 pm

Sorry but the jagged edges and bumps on the starfighter don't do it for me sorry. I see you tried to use SNOT though, that's good. Wink
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Alpha Beta on Wed Aug 11, 2010 4:56 pm

I don't like the SNOT hanging off the wings, the rest is good though.
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by bl*c on Wed Aug 11, 2010 5:08 pm

The second pair of wings looks strange to me. I also don't like those 4 tiles that hang over the edge on the wings and the front. Wink

The rest is really cool. I can just see myself swooshing it. Wow this thing looks
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Danester Man on Wed Aug 11, 2010 5:18 pm

It looks to messy and just not right. And like bl*c said the double wings just don't fit.
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Legomotion95 on Wed Aug 11, 2010 5:19 pm

I love it. It reminds me of Nim's fighter of Jedi Starfighter.
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Rijulskywalker on Wed Aug 11, 2010 5:37 pm

Meh, it's okay. It's too jagged and the tiles hanging off the edge are weird. Like Bl*c said, the double wings are not looking too great. Maybe you could improve the cockpit a bit?
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Gerrard on Wed Aug 11, 2010 6:31 pm

danester man wrote:It looks to messy and just not right. And like bl*c said the double wings just don't fit.

Danestar, you know, why don't you post what I could improve on? Roll Eyes

And yes, I will update this.
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Doraff on Wed Aug 11, 2010 7:18 pm

I'd say it's pretty awesome! I'm amazed! Hola Wow!


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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Caboose on Wed Aug 11, 2010 9:24 pm

Try putting the second(bottom)wings upside down so it will be one large wing, and it would flow better.
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Rook on Wed Aug 11, 2010 9:30 pm

Really!? You've done better. Do you want my detailed feedback?
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Gerrard on Wed Aug 11, 2010 10:09 pm

Rook wrote:Really!? You've done better. Do you want my detailed feedback?

Can I get it in a pm? Thanks.

This is my first MOC in 3 months, cut me some slack. Razz
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Darman on Wed Aug 11, 2010 10:11 pm

You should have learned by now slack and Cabg don't go together in the same sentence unless it is something about fishing. Razz
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Gerrard on Wed Aug 11, 2010 11:10 pm

Darman wrote:You should have learned by now slack and Cabg don't go together in the same sentence unless it is something about fishing. Razz

Maybe I was fishing. Razz

Oh and V2 is coming soon. Just waiting for Rook's comments. *gulp*
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by bl*c on Wed Aug 11, 2010 11:24 pm

Wait, is this for our guild build thing?
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Gerrard on Thu Aug 12, 2010 12:09 am

bl*c wrote:Wait, is this for our guild build thing?

Yes, but I am going to update it, so it's not actually entered yet. Wink
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by bl*c on Thu Aug 12, 2010 12:16 am

Gerrard wrote:
bl*c wrote:Wait, is this for our guild build thing?
Yes, but I am going to update it, so it's not actually entered yet. Wink
Just making sure, I started to build a tank when I remembered we changed it to starfighter. :d'oh: Razz
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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Rook on Thu Aug 12, 2010 6:50 pm

IMAGE 1


1. Awkward dip between guns and wing.
2. Dark red piece hanging out into mid air.
3. Nice tail like pieces but I'd build up the bottom more. Make them look more fuel cells on a earth fighter jet.
4. Invert sloped piece pull back a stud or two so they are even. Then greeble the space along the front of the wing between the two slopes.
5. Slope the whole wing down about 5-15% with hinges and itíll have a move aggressive bird like look. Kind of like some of the SG1 ships.

IMAGE 2


1. Sloped pieces are really jumbled. Use more rather then spacing them apart with the 2x2 rounds with the smooth bottoms. Then maybe cover the bottom of the slopes with those rounds instead.
2. I'm never a big fan of leaving pieces open like this. It's a space ship cover up the gaps. Wow this thing looks


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Re: 10th Legion D-Wing Class Starfighter

Post by Gerrard on Thu Aug 12, 2010 10:00 pm

Thanks Rook! I will definitely be updating this!
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