457th Training Mission

By Delta on Flickr

[..LOADING..]

[..LOADING..]

[//CT:1616]

[..LOG 1..]

I was pulled out to go to Belasco for a training mission. After being deployed, I hunted for the probe droid. Then I found the clanker! It was to close too snipe, so I pulled out my knife, and sneaked up behind it. 3..2..1. I sliced an arm off and threw it to the side. As it turned around, my knife found its way into a chink in its armor, killing it instantly. Oil spurted out, confirming it's death. I walked on, feeling victorious. I looked back and saw that I left my knife. Can't leave my baby. Seems that this mission was successful. Now to see if I get in a legion...

[..END LOG..]

----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Shot of the probe droid.



An overview.



So, hope you guys like my MOC. I've really improved since I joined, even though I never really posted anything. This is my application for the 457th Corps, wish me luck!

C&C is always welcome, although I already sent it in. Enjoy!

I think you'll make it, not that there's much to do at the moment.

Wow, that is pretty epic. Although, I think the log sort of takes the probe as more of a living creature.

Nice build! Shouldn't be to hard to get in for you.

I think you'll make it, but for future; try not to make too much of a mish-mash. I find the Tan, Dark Tan, Dark Bley and Light all a bit too much. I also find vignettes are a lot more effective when there is only one view, but that's really my opinion.

EDIT:

I got a new background! Also a few minor fixings as well- added things to where the grill is, added the extra lights, and removed the dk tan.

It looks nice, but you really need to improve on your ground texturing. Simply placing pieces of the same general color in different shapes doesn't cut it. the ground has to flow, and cut back on the rubble. I do like the building/wall, though. Very nice decoration.

Yes, yes I do.

[quote]you really need to improve on your ground texturing. Simply placing pieces of the same general color in different shapes doesn't cut it. the ground has to flow, and cut back on the rubble.[quote]

I actually like the ground texturing, I think it works here. That said, I do think you should consider giving it a bit more thought in future.