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Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

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Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:05 am

Story: Viper and the team are going deeper inside the underground droid factory. Will they make it out alive, or get crushed by the droids inside?


*Tzzzzt-pew! Tzzzt-tzzzzztztzzz-pew!* "O2, has the Jedi been stopped," inquires the Air Droid Captain. "No sir! We're having trouble detaining the meatbag Razz ."


"Ahh!" "Uh-oh! Blast them!"


Bam-bam! "Aaaah!"


"Kill them!" "Roger-roger!"


"Intruder alert! Intruder alert!" "Master, if we bring down that ramp, it'll block off those SBDs!"


Arth listens and then uses a powerful force-push. Whoooooooossshh!


*Ching* *Tzzztooo...* Metal scratches along the ramp and the ramp completely is demolished.


"Battle Droids!" Keya screams. "Men, take positions!" Viper commands.


"Ahh!" "Roger-roger!"


"C'mon! Lets get outta this scrapyard," says Arth. "Yessir!"


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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Zepher on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:09 am

Yo, here's my problem Alpha. you're mocs and stories are nice, but take more time on them. This has nothing outstanding about it. Try to throw in as many extra things as you can. As far as I can tell this moc as lots of empty space, ONE control panal, a few droids, two production belts, and vecheiles built by the lego company. Put more time into each moc. A lot more time.
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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:16 am

Zepher wrote:Yo, here's my problem Alpha. you're mocs and stories are nice, but take more time on them. This has nothing outstanding about it. Try to throw in as many extra things as you can. As far as I can tell this moc as lots of empty space, ONE control panal, a few droids, two production belts, and vecheiles built by the lego company. Put more time into each moc. A lot more time.

Yeah, Im not the guy who likes detail, but I I should spend a tad bit more time on it and add stuff.

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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by No_Name on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:20 am

It's nice....but i feel its missing something. Maybe more detail or more minifigs. I do agree Zeph because it doesn't have enough time and detail put into it. Also, fill the empty space maybe add your own vehicles aswell as the Lego ones. I do like the battle scene, though. I don't get how the see-through bar things look like a force push. Maybe photoshop it to add more detail to the push. Or just use the paint system that comes with the computer built-in. Don't get me wrong its a GOOD start.


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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Brandon9 on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:21 am

Maby you could use treds for the droid convaer belt (spelling). Smile Fordo Yo!
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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:22 am

No_Name wrote:It's nice....but i feel its missing something. Maybe more detail or more minifigs. I do agree Zeph because it doesn't have enough time and detail put into it. Also, fill the empty space maybe add your own vehicles aswell as the Lego ones. I do like the battle scene, though. I don't get how the see-through bar things look like a force push. Maybe photoshop it to add more detail to the push. Or just use and paint system that comes with the computer built-in. Don't get me wrong its a GOOD start.

Well I dont edit my pics, I just take them, upload them, and then post em. Im thinking of doing a v2. How about it eh?

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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Uberlag on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:40 am

It looks pretty empty, Because there's no people moving around in a droid factory, make it more compact, then you'll be set. It IS a good start however.
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Post by Comrade Faie on Tue Aug 05, 2008 1:51 am

I agree with Zeph an Uberlag. It needs more stuff, I like it nonetheless. Fordo Yo!

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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by astoriabluelegos on Tue Aug 05, 2008 2:40 am

I also find it a bit.....spacious, but what you've GOT is a pretty good. Wink Blue Arc
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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by ARC CloneTrooper141 on Tue Aug 05, 2008 2:59 am

I really like it, but you should use photoshop for when he uses the force.
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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by Alpha on Tue Aug 05, 2008 3:01 am

ARC CloneTrooper141 wrote:I really like it, but you should use photoshop for when he uses the force.

When it comes to MOCs, no photoshop. Just doesnt work for me.

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Re: Tatooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by legorevolution on Tue Aug 05, 2008 7:34 am

Alpha wrote:
Zepher wrote:Yo, here's my problem Alpha. you're mocs and stories are nice, but take more time on them. This has nothing outstanding about it. Try to throw in as many extra things as you can. As far as I can tell this moc as lots of empty space, ONE control panal, a few droids, two production belts, and vecheiles built by the lego company. Put more time into each moc. A lot more time.

Yeah, Im not the guy who likes detail, but I I should spend a tad bit more time on it and add stuff.

Well put Zeph. Alpha, I used to be pretty much the same exact guy. If you go to my mocpages account (in my signature) you can find some old mocs of mine that are strikingly similar to this. I used to feelt the same way and didn't pay attention to detail, but I can say that it is a necessity. It makes your mocs look juicey, and more realistic! Take a shot at it like I did. Try to make a greebled wall full of sensors and vents, then improve upon that.
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Re: Tantooine Assault-Scratch One Droid Factory

Post by CAPTAINREX on Wed Aug 06, 2008 12:45 am

I like how you used the clear bricks to make arth appear to use the force. Nice touch.
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