Quath Assault-Betrayal
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DarthPineapple
Axel
J4ke
Comrade Faie
Bly
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Alpha
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Quath Assault-Betrayal
Story: Terrorist Sergeant Lyra has made her way to the power generator, to reset the detonator to explode sooner. However, scientist Alpha has other plans. He suspects the terrorists don't care about comitting suicide, and that is why they are blowing up the base with hundreds of terrorists. Now, he must stop him, for the sake of the Emporer and the Republic. Will he succeed?
"AAAAAHHH!" comes a deafening scream from a distraght Techno Union officer, as Terrorist Sergeant Lyra throws a knife at him. "That's what you get for interfering. Now I'd better get workin on that detonation code." Lyra mumbles to herself.
Lyra types in the passage code, and reworks the detonation timer. She sets it to detonate manually. The machine accepts the code and a detonation gun appears in her hand. She prepares to pull the trigger...
but suddenly Alpha appears and shoots it out of her hand. "Don't move." Alpha commands as he glares at her. "Have you finally accepted how useless your Droid Army is?" she sneers. "Well it's too late to stop, so I think I'll say good bye to this base." She reaches for her gun, and fires a shot.
Alpha leans back and dodges the shot. Lyra attempts to fire again but...
Alpha kicks the gun out of her hand and it falls to the floor.
Alpha prepares to kill Lyra but...
Terrorist Captain Kyle shoots Alpha, who dodges the bolt.
Just as Lyra gets up and prepares to kill Alpha, Alpha blasts Kyle in the neck, and is killed. Just as Lyra prepares to fire a shot...
Alpha preapres to duck, but the bolt isn't meant for him. The bolt hits Alpha's pistol, which falls to the ground.
Alpha dodges Lyra's many shots, and grabs her by the neck, and throws her against the wall. She immediately falls unconscious. Alpha shoots her a couple times, to make sure she is dead.
Alpha reaches for the control panel, and types in a deactivation code. The countdown stops, and the detonation gun blows up. Satisfied, Alpha pulls out a thermal detonator.
Alpha attaches the thermal detonator to the control panel, and sets a detonation timer for five minutes. He then runs out of the base.
Five minutes later, the detonator explodes, however, it turns out the detonator slightly malfuntioned, so it didn't blow up the base. However, the control panel blew up. The power generator stops sending energy through the two power crystals.
The generator collapses and explodes. The Techno Union officers body is ripped in half, as he was the closet to the detonation. It causes a chain reaction, and soon, the whole base goes out in a big BOOM! Alpha watches from his ship, The Crusader, as the base goes into flames and explodes. He also sees Viper and Arth in a ROS, but doesn't pursue.
There you have it. I think thats the last part of Terrorism... OR IS IT?
"AAAAAHHH!" comes a deafening scream from a distraght Techno Union officer, as Terrorist Sergeant Lyra throws a knife at him. "That's what you get for interfering. Now I'd better get workin on that detonation code." Lyra mumbles to herself.
Lyra types in the passage code, and reworks the detonation timer. She sets it to detonate manually. The machine accepts the code and a detonation gun appears in her hand. She prepares to pull the trigger...
but suddenly Alpha appears and shoots it out of her hand. "Don't move." Alpha commands as he glares at her. "Have you finally accepted how useless your Droid Army is?" she sneers. "Well it's too late to stop, so I think I'll say good bye to this base." She reaches for her gun, and fires a shot.
Alpha leans back and dodges the shot. Lyra attempts to fire again but...
Alpha kicks the gun out of her hand and it falls to the floor.
Alpha prepares to kill Lyra but...
Terrorist Captain Kyle shoots Alpha, who dodges the bolt.
Just as Lyra gets up and prepares to kill Alpha, Alpha blasts Kyle in the neck, and is killed. Just as Lyra prepares to fire a shot...
Alpha preapres to duck, but the bolt isn't meant for him. The bolt hits Alpha's pistol, which falls to the ground.
Alpha dodges Lyra's many shots, and grabs her by the neck, and throws her against the wall. She immediately falls unconscious. Alpha shoots her a couple times, to make sure she is dead.
Alpha reaches for the control panel, and types in a deactivation code. The countdown stops, and the detonation gun blows up. Satisfied, Alpha pulls out a thermal detonator.
Alpha attaches the thermal detonator to the control panel, and sets a detonation timer for five minutes. He then runs out of the base.
Five minutes later, the detonator explodes, however, it turns out the detonator slightly malfuntioned, so it didn't blow up the base. However, the control panel blew up. The power generator stops sending energy through the two power crystals.
The generator collapses and explodes. The Techno Union officers body is ripped in half, as he was the closet to the detonation. It causes a chain reaction, and soon, the whole base goes out in a big BOOM! Alpha watches from his ship, The Crusader, as the base goes into flames and explodes. He also sees Viper and Arth in a ROS, but doesn't pursue.
There you have it. I think thats the last part of Terrorism... OR IS IT?
Last edited by Alpha on Mon Sep 01, 2008 10:06 pm; edited 2 times in total
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
- Age : 29
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
Aki-kundu wrote:Nice! Is Alpha turning good?
Nope, he is just doing this to save his own skin. He's a CIS scientist who later helps find a crystal for the Death Star's superlaser.
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
- Age : 29
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
commanderbly42 wrote:great scene - I really love your storylines!
I second that! This was by far the best storyline yet! Good job!
Comrade Faie- Guild Member
- Age : 29
Location : Viva La France and Rick Alstley
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
Nice vig, simple but detailed, in a sense. The story is good too.
Aren't harpoons a little low-tech for these chaps though?
Aren't harpoons a little low-tech for these chaps though?
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
Talk about brutal! That is the most violent one yet !
-Aki-- Non-Guild Member
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
J4ke wrote:Nice vig, simple but detailed, in a sense. The story is good too.
Aren't harpoons a little low-tech for these chaps though?
Hey, at least they're fun! Which would you rather; a gun that kills the clean way, or a gun that fires giant pieces of pointy metal at people?
Axel- Non-Guild Member
- Age : 30
Location : Australia
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
Aki-kundu wrote:Talk about brutal! That is the most violent one yet !
That's because they're terrorists.
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
- Age : 29
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
This is one of the comics in which you actually made a decent MOC. I still advise to use some text baloons.
DarthPineapple- VIP Former Staff
- Age : 30
Location : The Netherlands
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
The crusader? Will you build and post it?
Astor- Guild Member
- Age : 28
Location : Oslo, Norway
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
Umm...with a few seconds of scrolling through, all I saw were a bunch of people randomly shooting each other, and then they all die. Text bubbles make it more interesting? Possibly? Probably? Definantly. Good work though.
Clonecommando007- Kinda like a UFO
- Location : Ohio
Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal
That's not true. If you follow who the characters are you don't need text bubbles. It's a story, not a comic.
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