Episode 16: The Plan

Episode 16
Season 2
"The Plan"

Other Episodes in this story-arc:
Episode 13
Episode 14
Episode 15

































Heavy stuff at the end there.

Again vote for your favorite! They may just survive!

-Zeph

Ahh.

Nice floor tiles! Although, I don't understand that in the 2nd or 3rd frame, how'd that Clone (Can't remember names especially when they all look identical) survive? He had a blaster pointed at him...

I like the Moc, although a poll for every comic... weird...

Looks very cool, as usual Zeph.

This is really cool! I like that little transport of theirs.

DarthPineapple wrote:Looks very cool, as usual Zeph.

Totally agree here, but my favorite part of this is all of the characters and how you have "rookies" with the squad!

Alpha wrote:Ahh.

Nice floor tiles! Although, I don't understand that in the 2nd or 3rd frame, how'd that Clone (Can't remember names especially when they all look identical) survive? He had a blaster pointed at him...

Gimmick was in the second and third frame. He's the one with a bag. I made the important ones (other than Nooks) stand out. And I needed a way to blaance him He shot first (Like Solo!)

darth yoda wrote:I like the Moc, although a poll for every comic... weird...

Well, I like to know how people like the characters as the story evolves It tells me who I need to work on as a character, and who they would be the saddest to see die.

I like your comics, they don't show a big amount of the area which is good because if you show to much there would not be plot and setting development. I love your plots!

For those of you who are wondering, next week will basically just be an insane fight for both groups. Be on the look-out. And if you don't want someone dead, vote for them. Or else they will die. Most members will.

P.S. Thanks Faie!

a very good comic i hope nooks survives because it would be like episode 5 of the new clone wars seires where the rookys are the main characters

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Well, this does draw from rookies, only there's one rookie and a bunch of vets, instead of the other way around! Thanks for the sorta low amount of feedback everyone...

Very cool, my only suggestion would be to make the lazers bigger.

GODAMNIT! I've typed this commentary three times now, because my browser wants to go back a page (erasing my work) each time I accidentally tap the bloody backspace key after deselecting my text!

Anywho....

Story: great! Try to make it a little less strained (it comes off as that) and yer golden! It's a bit wordy and all, and while I don't consider it a bad thing, brevity is sometimes appreciated in a audience.

MOC: I envy your camera's macro function! Because of it, you're able to make these nice, in-close, all-lego backdrops without fretting over blur! The street looks quite nice, and you haven't a problem with clutter, like I do.

GIMP: Don't be afraid to make those speech bubbles bigger. Turn on the centering option for the text, use a bigger font, and try out some unique fonts on the more important characters. Use it to fit their personalities (I.E: Turaki is very refined, Book Antiqua; Meehan is a bit unsure of himself, the wavy Manderia MT). Start defining your blaster bolts early on in your career, and you'll get good at it. I'm still struggling to get mine up to speed with everything else .


All in all, solid comic! I can't wait for some action later on in the series.

Thanks so much Sial! It really means a lot from you, and on top of that, you give good advice!

I love all the tiles, and you have great photography, but my general opinion here is too much talk too little action. Good work though!

Clonecommando007 wrote:I love all the tiles, and you have great photography, but my general opinion here is too much talk too little action. Good work though!

Yeah, this arc is a massive amount of talking. The next episode should be about 20 pages of sheer action!

I like chucky becouse hes named after a killer doll!
EDIT: NVM I read wrong!

Once again you've made a great comic. I hope that not too many clones die (At least the ones I like!). Can't wait for the next instalment. great story and photography too!

This was a great read I loved it,at the end (snif) that was sad. It was a great comic!
-Commander324

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