C.J.'s log. Entry #1

For those of you who can't get into the JAC I started a roleplay type game where alll the JAC members have crashed and we are trying to get off this planet. That is about all I feel like explaining

C.J.'s Log:

We had just gotten out of hyperspace when the seperatist started to shoot. They hit our left engine and we started spinning. eclipseGrafx was able to keep us from hitting the cliff or landing in the ocean. But right now it doesn't seem like it did a whole lot of good. With no transport or communications we are stuck here. And the force knows what else is here. After we got out of the ship we realized not everyone made it and that some of us were to badly wounded to look for a way off the planet. Luckily we had a med-droid to take care of the wounded. We were soon organized and given directions to go. In the morning I will be going to these coordinance 45364-67235.

C.J. out.

Awesome MOC Cj! I like how you made the field, very creative.

GeneralKydanWitress wrote:Awesome MOC Cj! I like how you made the field, very creative.

Thank you Kydan for your encouragement.

CJ, you are a blossoming builder. This is a very well built MOC, but bland. I know this is the start of a story, but I think if you elaborated on the crashed ship and landforms in this area, you could make this 10 times better.

BTW, I read the stuff in the JAC area, but I still stand firm on this.

Not a bad start but could be improved. Use ideas from the backstory to add to your MOC. In the story you said that the ship was damaged, so some debris could be on the ground or you could build the ship and have part of it on fire. Also just making a plain field is too simple IMO. Try adding some trees or streams and give it a more "Deserted Island" look.

Troopa Daisy wrote:Not a bad start but could be improved. Use ideas from the backstory to add to your MOC. In the story you said that the ship was damaged, so some debris could be on the ground or you could build the ship and have part of it on fire. Also just making a plain field is too simple IMO. Try adding some trees or streams and give it a more "Deserted Island" look.

It really isn't flat it has detailed hills on it but you just can't really see them. This also isn't a deserted island.