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Welcome to the Brain

Post by Zepher on Wed Dec 31, 2008 4:55 pm

Lord Chester settled down to what he thought would be a normal night of good sleep. When he woke up he found himself floating in a snowy land. His body moved through the air towards the stair on its own accord, where it set him down gently.



Chester: Where am I? Is anyone out there?
Unknown voice: Welcome Lord Chester!
Chester: What? Who’s there?



Voice: Me. I'm your guide.
Chester: Guide? Through where? Where am I? Did you kidnap me! What's the ransom! you know, I own a very powerful company, they will find me.
Guide: We didn't kidnap you! Don't be ridiculous! Your brain brought you here.
Chester: My... my brain? Where is here?
Guide: Your mind. Well, a metaphorical version of it at least.



Chester: Oh...
Guide: You were brought here to see what sort of man you are!
Chester: OH! It's like that movie! You know the Christmas Pact and Present and all that! That one!
Guide: Um, yeah, I guess it is sorta like that...



Chester: What's that over there?
Guide: That's your metaphorical values, and your metaphorical love.



Chester: They don't look very healthy.
Guide: They aren't. Your values started dying a while ago. When you started to climb the ranks of you company, you sort of gave up on them. They're area turned to snow, sand and rock. It spilled over into your love's land too.
Chester: Oh.
Guide: Well, we must keep moving.



Chester: Where are we now?
Guide: Your sea of Unconsciousness. It's all your back thought things.
Chester: What's that?
Guide: That's your breathing.



Guide: Inhale through the front and exhale through the...



BOOM!
Guide: ...back.
Chester: What's the other thing?
Guide: That's your dreams.



Chester: It's all money.
Guide: Yep.
Chester: Oh... I get it now.
Guide: Come along. We need to see your memory.



Chester: So this is my memory?
Memory: Sure is Lord Lester!
Chester: Chester.
Memory: Yes. Whatever.



Memory: These here are your more important memories. We make sure to keep them safe from the flooding of the Unconscious Sea by bringing them up here and show casing them. On your left you'll see your less important memories. Those can be lost at any time.



Chester: What are those little heads?
Memory: Well, Jester-
Chester: Chester.
Memory: Right, Jester, they gather the memories!
Chester: Why do all the memories look the same?
Memory: Well, you haven't really done anything with your life. Haven't been to many cool places or done cool things.
Chester: I guess you're right.



Memory: Looks like they found a good memory. We'll have to find a spot for it! Good bye Carl.
Chester: Chester.
Memory: Charles! Good bye!
Chester: Why can't he remember my name?
Guide: Your memory has memory issues. That's irony for you. If you ever get out of here, develop a sense of humor. No one else down here things its funny.
Chester: What do you mean if?
Guide: Moving along!



Chester: Where are we now?
Guide: The imagination!



Chester: Who is that?
Guide: That's the woman in charge of the Imagination. I've always been told to avoid her. (I so almost put handcuffs in that box next to her, but decided against it because I have none.)



Chester: If she's anything like her real world counterparts, I'd avoid her at all costs.
Guide: But then again, your ability to love is dying a while over.
Chester: That's true.



Chester: Where are we headed now?
Guide: The house of Manners.



Chester: Is that good?
Guide: Depends.



Guide: Hello Manners.
Manners: Hello Chester. Hello good sir. Late as usual.
Guide: Afraid so. Memory held us up.
Chester: I'm never late!
Manners: But you've given up on respecting people. Maybe if you had paid more attention to that you wouldn't be about to be killed.



Chester: What?
Manners: Oh, um, guess you haven't been... carrying along. I mustn't hold you! Being punctual is always important!
Guide: Yes come along.



Chester: Dead... dead? Getting killed? Where are we now?
Guide: What does it look like?
Chester: A construction site.



Guide: Correct. We started building you humor, here, but early in your life we realized you weren't really using it. So we stopped.
Chester: That's sad...



Chester: What's around this corner?
Guide: You probably shouldn't go there...



Chester: Holy...
Guide: Yeah... your Death. This just appeared a while ago. I'm afraid. Turns out some one in your big company's going to try to kill you.



Guide: Or rather, he's going to try to kill you. This is supposed to teach you how to be a better person, and if you don't, you'll be killed.
Chester: And if I do become a better person?
Guide: Um... you may be killed anyways. Maybe this is just used to get you into heaven. If you believe in that sort of thing. If you believe in that sort of thing. Your faith had a heart attack a few years back... so...



Chester: You know what, I probably learned something from this. Now if we could hurry back so that I could save my life...
Guide: 'Spose that would be good. Hope you really learned something!



Guide: Best of luck up there sir!
Chester: And you too sir!
Guide: Thanks.

OVER ALL SHOTS









CAST



(Some people may notice that Rook is Death. I'd respond "Doesn't he occupy that spot in your mind too?)
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by DarthPineapple on Wed Dec 31, 2008 4:59 pm

Wow Zeph, I have no words... Hola Wow!
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Post by Jens on Wed Dec 31, 2008 5:08 pm

DarthPineapple wrote:Wow Zeph, I have no words... Hola Wow!

At least you have more than 5, hehe.

Well, this Moc is great and has a lot of good humour which I love. My favorite part is the part with Memory.
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by -Aki- on Wed Dec 31, 2008 5:27 pm

This just left me speechless... Shocked

It's amazing!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Bly on Wed Dec 31, 2008 5:31 pm

Zepher, you have one amazing brain. Hola Wow!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by bonehead on Wed Dec 31, 2008 5:46 pm

That was very original. I liked it. It was something different from the average comic. Yet it was...weird. Good job though. Fordo Yo!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Zepher on Wed Dec 31, 2008 5:47 pm

Well Bonehead, it wasn't a comic. It was a MOC with a story!

Thanks to everyone! It was really fun!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by someguy577 on Wed Dec 31, 2008 6:22 pm

Wow, first of all the attention put into this set took my breath away and the idea was very original too. Second the MOC had a great story to go with it and it had humor. Razz great job!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Kieya'Yatinn on Wed Dec 31, 2008 6:25 pm

Hmmm... looks great. Rook doesn't belong in that spot in my mind. It's this scarry clown. *Shudders at the mention of clown*
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Post by 667thLegion on Wed Dec 31, 2008 6:35 pm

Holy Maccaroni! Hola Wow! That's just awesome!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Jedi Joe on Wed Dec 31, 2008 7:04 pm

If you weren't holding the contest, I would so definitely vote for you. Fantastic work, Zeph! It was a very touching story! A toast!
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Post by Comrade Faie on Wed Dec 31, 2008 7:13 pm

Where's my kerchief? Razz Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. The story, the MOC, everything. great job! Fordo Yo!

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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by bonehead on Wed Dec 31, 2008 7:17 pm

Zepher wrote:Well Bonehead, it wasn't a comic. It was a MOC with a story!

Oh. O.k. It just seemed like a comic the way you put it together. Fordo Yo!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Igor7 on Wed Dec 31, 2008 7:48 pm

That was a beutiful MOC. THe story, design, colors...WoW
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Post by Clonecommando007 on Wed Dec 31, 2008 8:32 pm

Very nice! I like the overall MOC's and all the seperate parts of it. great work and comic!

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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Zepher on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:17 pm

Clonecommando007 wrote:Very nice! I like the overall MOC's and all the seperate parts of it. great work and comic!

Not a comic. Thanks.

Jedi Joe wrote:If you weren't holding the contest, I would so definitely vote for you. Fantastic work, Zeph! It was a very touching story! A toast!

Why does that mean you won't vote for me Waaa!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Darth Yoda on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:24 pm

Ok zeph, I have a few major gripes and complements... To me, entering a Moc in your own contest really seems like an excuse to not give people LEGIT prizes. I enter things in my own contest, but either do not enter it into the poll, or just see how I did in the poll and then give a prize to the person behind me...(If I placed. Wink ) You also made a story which you didn't tell other people to do... Your Moc explains a lot because you made a story about it. This would be unfair to judge regular Mocs against....On to the Moc, I didn't like how you have a lot of the same pieces everywhere... To some people it's very obvious you had a Major splurge at PaB... Razz The crystals look kind of added on, and not in place. Sorry for Poopin' da party!

On to the stuff that you actually wanted to hear... Wink I looovee how you got all of those blue tiles to make a nice smooth look...All of the tiles in this Moc make it very good. The minifigs where a nice touch to some more advanced building than you tend to usually use....The piled grass was also creative. Smile The size is also very nice... I'm having trouble building big these days so kudos to you for making this big... Shocked Anyways.... here's your big comment from me that you've always wanted.... Happy Holidays! Smile


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Post by Zepher on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:30 pm

darth yoda wrote:Ok zeph, I have a few major gripes and complements... To me, entering a Moc in your own contest really seems like an excuse to not give people LEGIT prizes. I enter things in my own contest, but either do not enter it into the poll, or just see how I did in the poll and then give a prize to the person behind me...(If I placed. Wink ) Another thing that I didn't like was how you manipulated everyone by saying stuff like "Oh, just wait I'll have it up soon... I've been working on this masterpiece for a long time..." You're a Mod, and have a great influence on people... I bet some people just looked at a picture for a few seconds and said something like holy moly it's amazing!11!111 mostly based on how you made a dramatic last minute entry that is fairly large in size. You also made a story which you didn't tell other people to do... Your Moc explains a lot because you made a story about it. This would be unfair to judge regular Mocs against....On to the Moc, I didn't like how you have a lot of the same pieces everywhere... To some people it's very obvious you had a Major splurge at PaB... Razz The crystals look kind of added on, and not in place. Sorry for Poopin' da party!

On to the stuff that you actually wanted to hear... Wink I looovee how you got all of those blue tiles to make a nice smooth look...All of the tiles in this Moc make it very good. The minifigs where a nice touch to some more advanced building than you tend to usually use....The piled grass was also creative. Smile The size is also very nice... I'm having trouble building big these days so kudos to you for making this big... Shocked Anyways.... here's your big comment from me that you've always wanted.... Happy Holidays! Smile

Okay... There's lots to reply too. I am planning on giving a second and third prize if I win, instead of a first and second, if I do win. Don't worry, you will not be cheated.

As for entrering your own contest, it's fine as long as it's decided by voting. i have no more control over who the winner is other then you do.

I always make a story. If that's part of my MOC, then so be it. I use my talents. I like writing. I write a story.

As for the build of this MOC: I used no good techniques. I know that. But MOCs are based on looks, and sometimes lots of the same things look good. I thought it was imprssive and a nice MOC to look at.

Thanks for commenting. Though some of those things hurt my feeling a fair aount, I really am glad to hear an opnion! Especially yours!
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Darth Yoda on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:34 pm

On the contrary you did use some advanced techniques.... The gray walkway is very detailed, and the overhang thing is still puzzling me... Surprised Shocked
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Jedi Joe on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:36 pm

Zepher wrote:
Jedi Joe wrote:If you weren't holding the contest, I would so definitely vote for you. Fantastic work, Zeph! It was a very touching story! A toast!

Why does that mean you won't vote for me Waaa!

Oh, I thought this didn't count as a legit entry. If it is, you have my vote! Wink
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Post by Zepher on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:36 pm

What walk way. And no, to tell you the truth, it was just a lot of tiles. That's all the MOC was.
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Darth Yoda on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:38 pm

The thing in the second to last picture silly! Razz
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Zepher on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:39 pm

What, the House of Manners? I just porpped 'em up there! They wedge between to supposrt beams, and stick Razz Told you. But it looks . good, so it's okay.
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Re: Welcome to the Brain

Post by Darth Yoda on Wed Dec 31, 2008 10:42 pm

Well, that part looks great... Tiles aren't always bad you know... Wink
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Post by Thunder-blade on Wed Dec 31, 2008 11:40 pm

Woah Hola Wow!

That's awesome Zeph! The story was very creative and was heavily reinforced by the MOC!!
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