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541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Sialboats on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:17 pm

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Just plot development for the first comic. Still working out my temperate building style. Also including a new time mechanic to the story.





























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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by [Jay] on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:23 pm

But, where's the violence and gore? Hola Wow!

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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Jens on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:24 pm

Maybe there was no action, but it was really well written, good job! A toast!
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Post by ODST7 on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:25 pm

Wow! This wonderful, glad to see you revived the series.
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Sialboats on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:25 pm

Matchstick wrote:But, where's the violence and gore? Hola Wow!

You should find violence and gore in the second Razz ....

ODST7 wrote:Wow! This wonderful, glad to see you revived the series.

It was never dead! Simply being worked on Wink !
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Thunder-blade on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:36 pm

Oh my... these effects are awesome! Especially in the first few pics! Hola Wow!

The story and dialogue is once again top-notch! The attention to detail is astounding!

Your sets.. everything...

*goes into cardiac arrest*
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Post by 80-0 on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:41 pm

The writing is amazing! I really love the way that you played the idea of a basic clone(commanders are special, and all, but not as independent as commandos or ARCs) coming into a regular lifestyle was great; I'd say on Traviss level, and that's sayin' something. Wink

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Post by The Jinja Ninja on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:47 pm

Finally, someone listened to me about character development! Wink Okay, so Ied's reactions to 'normal' life are pretty familiar to those who've read Triple Zero, but hey, I enjoyed it. Smile
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Felix42 on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:48 pm

Sweet job! I love the burial ground! But it was sad to see Meehan dead. I love the house that they went to! The house is very relistic. There was anything wrong with the comic!
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Post by Gerrard on Sat Feb 28, 2009 5:58 pm

Nice, it was very realistic! Love the burial!
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Alpha on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:20 pm

Nice! Another character developement, aye?

I really need to BL some bley plates, I barely have any.

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Post by DarthPineapple on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:40 pm

Nice, original comic idea you have there. Nice base.
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Zepher on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:54 pm

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Finally, someone listened to me about character development! Wink Okay, so Ied's reactions to 'normal' life are pretty familiar to those who've read Triple Zero, but hey, I enjoyed it. Smile

I left you a long comment about that on mine Razz

But I agree with Jinj, so happy to see characters coming out, something I've needled you about for a while too. How'd Meehan die again? He was shot, but he recovered on Arkania, I think...
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Sialboats on Sat Feb 28, 2009 7:12 pm

Zepher wrote:
The Jinja Ninja wrote:Finally, someone listened to me about character development! Wink Okay, so Ied's reactions to 'normal' life are pretty familiar to those who've read Triple Zero, but hey, I enjoyed it. Smile

I left you a long comment about that on mine Razz

But I agree with Jinj, so happy to see characters coming out, something I've needled you about for a while too. How'd Meehan die again? He was shot, but he recovered on Arkania, I think...

You thought. He died from a fatal wound to the chest Wink .
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Commander_Fox on Sat Feb 28, 2009 7:26 pm

great! The detail about the food is good, and I like the new Ied!! Awesome!
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Thunder-blade on Sat Feb 28, 2009 8:55 pm

Sial, why did you release these 2 episodes right at the same time?

(not that I'm complaining, I loved that you did it all at once, I'm just curious at the reason behind it.)
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Sialboats on Sat Feb 28, 2009 9:31 pm

Thunder-blade wrote:Sial, why did you release these 2 episodes right at the same time?

(not that I'm complaining, I loved that you did it all at once, I'm just curious at the reason behind it.)

I felt that I hadn't been keeping up with the weekly comic standard, so this is sort of my paying of the comic debt.
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Thunder-blade on Sat Feb 28, 2009 9:33 pm

Ah.

That makes sense, I think I need to pay off my comic debt too.. Laughing
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Zepher on Sat Feb 28, 2009 9:50 pm

I think you should of gone back to the weekly format, and not of released two Sial. Things take breaks in between seasons, and this should too!
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Comrade Faie on Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:10 pm

great job! I love how simple it is but it still pulled me in!

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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Clonecommando007 on Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:14 pm

Heh heh, I like how he chugs the wine. Smile

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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Jedi Joe on Mon Mar 02, 2009 3:52 pm

Good work Sial! I love how you had this one for character development! I loved how Ied chugged the wine, and how he is finally being told about alcohol poisoning! Razz

I also love how you captured Ansion's climate and terrain perfectly, I hope some of the natives make an appearance. That would be awesome!

And, is the kama Ied's wearing the one I sent you? Shocked Razz
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Post by Sialboats on Mon Mar 02, 2009 11:29 pm

Jedi Joe wrote:I also love how you captured Ansion's climate and terrain perfectly, I hope some of the natives make an appearance. That would be awesome!

And, is the kama Ied's wearing the one I sent you? Shocked Razz

I'm still trying to find out a way to make them lizardy enough... they're not trandos, but they're not human either, y'know.

And, yes Wink .
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Zepher on Tue Mar 03, 2009 1:16 am

The Killer Croc piece maybe? Found in Spider Man sets.
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Re: 541st Vendetta #1: Bittersweet

Post by Sialboats on Tue Mar 03, 2009 10:37 am

Zepher wrote:The Killer Croc piece maybe? Found in Spider Man sets.



No... too sinister. A rodian might work, maybe in olive green and without all the antenae. I might have to look into that Wink . I'm just glad the Human population is greater than the native Razz .
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