CABG Commercial #1(revised)

This is the Revised version, based on your suggestions, so, tell me which one is better.

You just can't guess which one I voted.

DarthPineapple wrote:You just can't guess which one I voted.

Thanks a lot DP!

astoriabluelegos wrote:

DarthPineapple wrote:You just can't guess which one I voted.

Thanks a lot DP!

Your welcome. I just can't understand why you vote yourself to that island.

DarthPineapple wrote:Your welcome. I just can't understand why you vote yourself to that island.

I was having a "Gilligan's Island" moment.

Pack your bags Astoria. Ha!

Without a doubt the second one, although I still feel that the URL should be included a bit more. I suppose it is shown enough...

I thought it was great

Why would anyone vote the third? Good job Astoria!

Zepher wrote:Why would anyone vote the third? Good job Astoria!

It goes back a long time Zepher... it was his family and my family... we hated each other.

Commander Faie wrote:

Zepher wrote:Why would anyone vote the third? Good job Astoria!

It goes back a long time Zepher... it was his family and my family... we hated each other.

*eye twitches* How inventive of you... I can't see the new video; maybe it's this old PC in the hotel lobby but I'll be sure to vote when I get back. Although I'll only be home for a day before I... Woah, guess I'd better mention that.

I went for option 1. Try and improve it and hopefully we will have a rush of new guys wanting to join .

Commander Faie wrote:It goes back a long time Zepher... it was his family and my family... we hated each other.

That's right, and our family's STILL hate each other

Seemed long. Still need work on the text formating. PM me if you want detailed advice. Everything else is good.

Rook wrote:Seemed long. Still need work on the text formating. PM me if you want detailed advice. Everything else is good.

PM'd! Too long eh, I'm not sure how to fix that...