Squad 42.II - Remastered IV and V: Previews! UPDATED TODAY

You have an Italian audience?

I still think the city is too grey and boring to be called Bellamore.

It's mostly sand red, which is kinda terracotta-ish, so the Mediterranean-y name fits IMO. Besides, New York looks nothing like York, Los Angeles has nothing to do with angels and I doubt there's much 'good air' in Buenos Aires.

True, but Baltar and I were chatting about this on mibbit earlier.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:You have an Italian audience?

100 views from Italy only yesterday, about 50,000 in 3 years!

Jens wrote:I still think the city is too grey and boring to be called Bellamore.

That's the name of the planet, the city is simply known as The Capitol.

Here's the planet, by the way!

The Jinja Ninja wrote:You have an Italian audience?

Hell, I have a Vietnamese audience.

YouTube is TEH WHOLE WORLD ya know.

PizzaMovies wrote:

The Jinja Ninja wrote:You have an Italian audience?

Hell, I have a Vietnamese audience.

YouTube is TEH WHOLE WORLD ya know.

Vietnam, Sudan, Mongolia, you name it i've got at least 8 views there.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:You have an Italian audience?

Mama mia, I can't-a wait-a for-a da next-a Squad-a Fourty-two-a!

Gareth, remind me, did you ever get around to naming the new planet and/or S42?

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Gareth, remind me, did you ever get around to naming the new planet and/or S42?

Yes... But i've forgotten the Squad names already. The new planet is Bascillion, although i'm currently having second thoughts about the entire plot of S42VI. It just doesn't seem practical or enthralling. I've got a second idea forming which involves all the same characters, but i'm still in between a rock and a hard place...

I could always be Story Editor.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:I could always be Story Editor.

I may take you up on that! Google Celtx, download it and i'll send you the script.

Downloaded it, have no idea how it works, would very much like the script now plzthx.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Downloaded it, have no idea how it works, would very much like the script now plzthx.

PM me your email address and i'll send it over!

Sorry for the slight detour..

But after seeing last week's episode, I realized how large the battles in the CW were (haven't seen Ep. 2 in awhile). And I remember in your last film (Alone in the Dark), the fight was pretty low scaled. I know this is in part, due to the situation, but do you have plans for making a larger scale battle in the next film?

Thunder-blade wrote:Sorry for the slight detour..

But after seeing last week's episode, I realized how large the battles in the CW were (haven't seen Ep. 2 in awhile). And I remember in your last film (Alone in the Dark), the fight was pretty low scaled. I know this is in part, due to the situation, but do you have plans for making a larger scale battle in the next film?

Yes, the scale is above that of most Clone Wars episodes. Don't fret! The scale of the new footage for the old films has been massively scaled up too, trust me!

Y'know, I think I can give you some pointers on the script right here without any spoilers. Let's see...

I like the story overall, but for a brickfilm it kinda drags. Unless you're planning on making it into a series of three or four installments, I don't think you could fit the plot comfortably into one short film without a) it being very rushed, or b) cutting a lot of the smaller character moments. If you do plan on trimming it, I would personally try and keep the worm stuff - great idea - but if I'm honest, you could cut:

- The limpets. I know, I know, but the story would pick up a lot of pace if they just got the MacGuffin and headed underground right away.

- Olsen. He adds very little IMO, is kinda annoying, and his purpose is pretty much entirely indicated by his mode of dress, if you know what I mean. Get the charges where they need to be some other way.

- Red Being a Dick. Normally I wouldn't sacrifice character pieces for a little plot momentum, but like Olsen, these bits just kinda get in the way and distract us from the situation at hand. Everybody's okay with commandoes having slightly less personality than the average character, and they could probably handle it better than Green and Red arguing over a comeback in the middle of a tense situation.

- Expo-bloody-sition. Really, we don't need to know exactly what gun Freeman is using; we don't need to know the full background of the mission; we don't even need to know that the Bascillion Sand Worm is called a Bascillion Sand Worm. Sometimes stuff happens and we don't know every little detail of why it happened - actually, that's how most things happen. You're allowed to leave use in the dark a little bit now and then if it speeds the story up.

In addition, I'd delete all the times someone says "oh God". None of our religions in the SWU, remember. You could either go with a stock SW swear (kriff, stang, etc.), make up a Bascillion swear, or go with a reference (frak, zark... 'belgium' is questionable ).

I'll read through it again later and see if anything else jumps out. I recommend get a couple other proof-readers specifically to look for dodgy dialogue and plot holes - those seem to be the two areas where people slip up the most.

You know... There were a fair few plot details there...

Obviously I don't know the whole thing, so keep whatever's vital. I'm just saying there's a lot of fat on this one compared to the skinnier offerings of your previous ventures. It's not necassarily a terrible thing, as long as you handle it really well.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Obviously I don't know the whole thing, so keep whatever's vital. I'm just saying there's a lot of fat on this one compared to the skinnier offerings of your previous ventures. It's not necassarily a terrible thing, as long as you handle it really well.

Well, thanks for the input. What did you think of the possibility of the second idea?

If you want a second person's thoughts, you know where to look Gareth .

Zepher wrote:If you want a second person's thoughts, you know where to look Gareth .

Yes indeed, I might do that.

I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

fithboy wrote:I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

I think i'll reserve it for people I actually know.

Garet6 wrote:

fithboy wrote:I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

I think i'll reserve it for people I actually know.

Sorry. Do you know Zepher?