727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
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727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
As the 44th Corps were ordered to do business on the junkyard planet of Metalorn, the 727th Legion was sent to investigate a droid factory, building droids for the Seperatists by the second. Jedi General SEPH GROUNDGLIDER found out that the droid factory was being supplied under the power of great crimelord Zorro the Hutt.
Seph decided to negotiate with the Hutt himself. He needed to give Zorro a warning, if he didn't heed it, there would be hell to pay for the notorious gangster...
Zorro: [Guards, bring me the messenger...]
Super Battle Droid: Roger Roger.
The SBDs bring in the messenger, a cloaked man with only one arm...
Zorro: [What brings you around these parts, human?]
Messenger: I see that you supply for the Seperatists...
Zorro: [Why do you care about such a thing?]
Messenger: Because I am for the Republic. My name is Seph Groundglider, and I am a Jedi General for the Clone Army!
Zorro: [HA HA HA HA! A Jedi? HA! The Jedi don't threaten me...]
Seph: I am sent here to give you a warning, if you don't listen, we will send a full scale assault on the palace AND the factory.
The SBDs propped up their arms, ready to shoot the Jedi.
Zorro: [Put your guns down, guards! Let him attack us, I'll adore watching him fail!]
Seph: You underestimate us, Zorro!
Zorro: [Take this peasant out of my sites, guards!]
The SBDs grabbed Seph by the arms and escorted him out of the palace.
Seph: *Brings out comlink* Blazer, this is General Groundglider, get the troops ready...
TO BE CONTINUED
Seph decided to negotiate with the Hutt himself. He needed to give Zorro a warning, if he didn't heed it, there would be hell to pay for the notorious gangster...
Zorro: [Guards, bring me the messenger...]
Super Battle Droid: Roger Roger.
The SBDs bring in the messenger, a cloaked man with only one arm...
Zorro: [What brings you around these parts, human?]
Messenger: I see that you supply for the Seperatists...
Zorro: [Why do you care about such a thing?]
Messenger: Because I am for the Republic. My name is Seph Groundglider, and I am a Jedi General for the Clone Army!
Zorro: [HA HA HA HA! A Jedi? HA! The Jedi don't threaten me...]
Seph: I am sent here to give you a warning, if you don't listen, we will send a full scale assault on the palace AND the factory.
The SBDs propped up their arms, ready to shoot the Jedi.
Zorro: [Put your guns down, guards! Let him attack us, I'll adore watching him fail!]
Seph: You underestimate us, Zorro!
Zorro: [Take this peasant out of my sites, guards!]
The SBDs grabbed Seph by the arms and escorted him out of the palace.
Seph: *Brings out comlink* Blazer, this is General Groundglider, get the troops ready...
TO BE CONTINUED
Jedi Joe- Guild Member
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Zorro the Hutt...
DarthPineapple- VIP Former Staff
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Perhaps more scenery and certianly more than just one picture next time, but it's a good start.
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I like the storyline! great job, and it's been added to the Main Page!
Alpha- Non-Guild Member
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Nice! I like the bodyguard, and the scar on Zorro!
-Aki-- Non-Guild Member
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Alpha wrote:I like the storyline! great job, and it's been added to the Main Page!
Thanks! But I don't see it on the main page...
Aki-Kundu wrote:Nice! I like the bodyguard, and the scar on Zorro!
Thanks, Aki. The bodyguard I think will be in future stories, keep a look-out for him. And that isnt a scar, it's a tatoo. It's the symbol of Metalorn.
Jedi Joe- Guild Member
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Is the messenger anakin?
Astor- Guild Member
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Astor wrote:Is the messenger anakin?
No. Read the story again. He is Seph Groundglider, the General of the 727th legion.
Jedi Joe- Guild Member
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Jedi Joe wrote:Astor wrote:Is the messenger anakin?
No. Read the story again. He is Seph Groundglider, the General of the 727th legion.
Oh. sorry about that. He had the same coulors.
Astor- Guild Member
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Anyone else notice the pipe I made for Zorro? XD
Jedi Joe- Guild Member
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
I really like Zorro the Hutt and his guard! I think the vig itself could use some greebles though....
Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Nice work on Zorro and his guard, and the pipe! But I think you could've had multiple scenes....This doesn't really make that good of a topic with just one picture that isn't all that elaborate. Try to expand on it next time.
Clonecommando007- Kinda like a UFO
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Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
Nice work on the zorro's personal body gaurd,but you should have made this into a comic
Delta04- Age : 104
Location : U.S
Re: 727th Mission to Metalorn Part 1: Negotiations
It is a comic, Mission to Metalon is the title of it. But on a compleatly unrelated note, It was mighty short, and come on, one picture!
major reviss- Non-Guild Member
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