The 27th Journals #1

Here is my first comic about my legion. So, look at my legion thread to see characters.
Here we go:










I hope you liked it!

Looks good, but the snow and the table are just a tad bit plain.

Yeah, I did it very quickly... anyways this is just to set the scene... The next ones will be better.

Nice beginning! Hope to see more soon. It looks very promising!

Thanks! Does anyone like Captain Adenn?

Well, it'd be kinda helpful clearly to state which one he is...

I don't like it.
You may be trying to start this, but if this is anything like what your going to do, it needs a major overhaul.

He's the commando. Next to Captain Turbo (red one). I told you to read my legion page for characters! *tisk* *tisk* Alpha...

@Uber: I'm a bit short on pieces right now...

I've seen amazing things done with small amounts of pieces.
And why would there be water, if it is a frozen planet it would freeze too, and why would Separatists need water?
And what genius would send 3 troopers to destroy a Sep. Base?

I mean, you could either SNOT the snow or layer it...

The ice melted from the heat of the base... and they're scouts if you even read the thing!

@Alpha: I'm short on white pieces period.

The base emits heat?

Anyhow, I can't wait to see your GIMP'ing. Presumable in the next comic, right?

pdragon27 wrote:The ice melted from the heat of the base... and they're scouts if you even read the thing!

@Alpha: I'm short on white pieces period.

Heat of the base?
What would they be doing to cause massive snow melt?

I imagine they don't want to freeze, and have the temperature at like 60 or 50 degrees...
And according to Aki, its a mining operation so maybe they are melting down the metal or whatever they are mining...

PD, do you have alot of gray pieces/bricks? If so, you could change the color of your ship's interior to gray. Just suggesting...

Nope. I think I used all of them on my bounty hunter's ship which I'll post later...

Looks awesome! A great start to our great storyline .

I'm not commenting on GIMP or anything, but rather your MOC and your... well... LOGIC!

Good god, the MOC is waaay too small and far to undetailed. I could understand if you didn't have a lot of pieces, but that's just sad! And for christ's sake, why would the clones look for water and suddenly decide to head back to base? Wouldn't they go and recce the area untill they found the base and THEN report back? Furthermore, wouldn't the seps be wise enough to cover the liquid water, and why would they even need liquid water in the first place? If it's runoff from the heat of the base, keep in mind that there isn't heat enough from a simple base to melt through ice on a sub-artic planet.

And I swear, if one more person makes a poor comic using a ice world, I will shoot them dead. Ice worlds, Arkania, is MINE !

Ok, I'll admit I didn't spend much time thiniking this one through... I was more focused on the next one.... Which will be better! And I only did an Ice Planet because my legion is a Cold Assault Legion! And because that's the storyline of the 162nd Eliminator Corps.

Hmm it's very simple but okay. Not the best comic I've seen but certainly not the worst either.

Thanks DP. The next one will be a lot better. I just order about 80 white pieces from PaB.

From PaB? Have you ever heard of Bricklink? You could get like 150 pieces for the same price, since PaB is very expensive!

Don't you mean Bricklink? Brickshelf is a gallery host.

My parents don't allow me to BL, I think...

Muskey15 wrote:Don't you mean Bricklink? Brickshelf is a gallery host.

'oh: Yes I meant Bricklink. I was too fast.