83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Yeah, I know. It's short. Too bad. Please tell me what you think of the effects!

That would have been a mediocre opening of a comic. "How are you?" "Got to go" "Bye" "Being Boarded!" For a holo like that just to set the scene you really on need a couple slides if that, and keep in mind it should be setting the scene...for the rest of the comic.

It was cool, but it didn't really have a point. Just some clone talking to another clone and asking how he has been (We don't really get an answer from the holo-clone) and then they get borded. There is no action, and the clones don't really talk very "clonish" (like: "Yes, sir! Right away, sir! Negative."). The hologram was cool, though.

This was my first realy critical post (I hoped this day would never come ).

Hope your next comic will be better.

The hologram is well done, but really?

"Buy Bye"

"Well, I've got to go" Cya later?

And when the clone said, "How are you", he never answered.

Keep working on it!

No plot, no action, nothing.

I would hardly even call this a teaser.

Well....the effects (the Hologram) are good...

BUT

I'm sorry, this is a sad excuse for a comic. It's way to short, and the dialogue is just unfitting for clones. "Buh-bye? I'm fine, how are you" Clones don't chit-chat with each other like that.

Room for improvement.

He didn't answer because they were suddenly atacked, and this was just setting the scene for the next one. So chill.

You should have posted this with the rest of your comic when you finished it....

Then again, now that you know that we think the dialogue sucks, you can fix that with the rest of the comic.

Be consistent with the font size and position in the bubbles - and spellcheck (boarded, not borded)

You're... kidding me .


The dialog sounds simply aweful. AWE-FUL. Yeah, your hologram was a step on the right path, but everything else is rubbish. The set's just the inside of a converted ISD , the crew is absent, so on so forth.

Please, FINISH your comics first, and actually BUILD sets .

Unfortunately, I am a TERRIBLE builder when it comes to vehicles, or even the inside of 'em.

The holo was Great. but as everyone has told you, dialogue, read the Republic commando books, they have a lot of clone dialogue. Like deece, which is a clone slang word for a DC-15/17, etc..., it will be very helpful. Oh and always when talking about comics, listen to Sialboats, he knows Everything.

This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

Calm down, it's not the worst, He could of done it in in two frames or worse, and you got to admit, the holo was cool.

Delta 1608 wrote:

foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

Calm down, it's not the worst, He could of done it in in two frames or worse, and you got to admit, the holo was cool.

Dude have you seen the other peoples comics. For example Sial is amazing with Holos and he still makes a better comic. Just because he made holograms doesn't mean that this is the best comic ever. If you want to know how to make a holo lik he did just type in GIMP in the search button and go to the first page and click the link that tells you how where to find how to make holos.

It's not terrible, it's just that ClnCmdo isn't capable of thinking of a plot or dialouge.

Well yeah it's just that I had hopes for him after seeing his two older comics I thought he could do a little more, but he still fails to amuse me.

Didn't I say it was the best, all I said was that it could be worse, I mean the holo could have been a guy painted BLUE.

Delta 1608 wrote:Didn't I say it was the best, all I said was that it could be worse, I mean the holo could have been a guy painted BLUE.

I know what you mean I think you should look at his two other comics before you really get amused with this one.

legorevolution wrote:STOP SPAMMING THIS THREAD NOW!

Okay I get the memo. Sorry ClnCmndo I feel so bad formyself .

Ok, I take that back, but were you referring to his worst comic, or that the comic is the worst on the CABG? AH never mind!

Now I feel insulted... But all of you should just calm down... Thanks Revo.

BTW, my next comic will have some action.

I thought it would be cool if The holo guy was shot THEN the holo disaperd

Use a spell checker!

Nice way to test your Gimping skills but please work on the plot.

foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

Join the Guild. Then you'll may have earned the right to even think this statement. :ROOOOOOL:

Rook wrote:

foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

Join the Guild. Then you'll may have earned the right to even think this statement. :ROOOOOOL:

I'm sorry Rook - but the combination of that failpost plus your retort was most enjoyable !