Alzoc III - Betrayal

Creator's Note

The command centre was originally going to be bigger, but I was pressured with time. Enjoy!

Nice! Again the snow looks good! And the comic dialogue is pretty good!

What font are those numbers!! I want it!!

If any of you were attentive, you would've noticed that bomb is the same Plasma Charge from Toran. Another of Alpha's creations, it can't be defused.

I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built!

darth yoda wrote:I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built!

The snow is brickbuilt... Actually, there really is no snow, besides the snow on the walls.

Alpha wrote:

darth yoda wrote:I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built!

The snow is brickbuilt... Actually, there really is no snow, besides the snow on the walls.

In the first picture the killed droids are on a white towel, no lego landscaping...

darth yoda wrote:

Alpha wrote:

darth yoda wrote:I like the comic but not the Moc. I suggest working on the Moc more than the comic and the story, try making the snow brick built!

The snow is brickbuilt... Actually, there really is no snow, besides the snow on the walls.

In the first picture the killed droids are on a white towel, no lego landscaping...

That was a scene from the last battle. And if you expect me to do something like this...


http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?i=3472165

You'll see that by the end of the century. I don't have unlimited pieces.

I don't expect that from you, but if you keep on building the same things you won't get much better...

I say this is a weird moc.

Admin - Please be more specific and post constructive criticism.

vecol05 wrote:I say this is a weird moc.

Aaand why is that a productive comment?

WHY is it a weird MOC?

I say it's pretty dang awesome, as the preceding comics have been!

Nice I like it, it might need some work, but good job.

Nice job once again! I really like the end.

Work on your positioning of text balloons - in panels 2 and 3, the dialogue looks the wrong way around. For stuff like the last two panels, check if your camera has a 'super macro' setting (or something similar). If not, see what you can do digitally, as it looks too blotchy at the moment.

I know. I spent half an hour toggling with the macro functions. I was thinking of enlarging the picture on GIMP, but I thought it wouldn't work. And is there a super macro function?

Awesome Alpha, that bomb looks great and very nice story.

Alpha wrote:And is there a super macro function?

My camera has one. It's great if you take the picture about a centimetre away from the subject.

WOW. That's amazing. But doesen't it cast a shadow on it if you use flash?

Wow. I envy your camera! I need those close-ups!

I like the idea of a bomb triggered when the Republic enters the base. Nice job on this!!!

Sort of small, but at least it is detailed. I like it, but it is not your best.

I agree on the detail, but it's a little awkward, some of the speech. I still envy those epic-glowy bolts though!

And why are there grey lines running up and down the first picture ?

The MOC is simple but effective. Why does the assassin has a black head?

You known Arath? He wears a pressure mask, and his head is black, so maybe the assasin is .