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Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Mon Sep 01, 2008 9:22 pm

Story: Terrorist Sergeant Lyra has made her way to the power generator, to reset the detonator to explode sooner. However, scientist Alpha has other plans. He suspects the terrorists don't care about comitting suicide, and that is why they are blowing up the base with hundreds of terrorists. Now, he must stop him, for the sake of the Emporer and the Republic. Will he succeed?


"AAAAAHHH!" comes a deafening scream from a distraght Techno Union officer, as Terrorist Sergeant Lyra throws a knife at him. "That's what you get for interfering. Now I'd better get workin on that detonation code." Lyra mumbles to herself.


Lyra types in the passage code, and reworks the detonation timer. She sets it to detonate manually. The machine accepts the code and a detonation gun appears in her hand. She prepares to pull the trigger...


but suddenly Alpha appears and shoots it out of her hand. "Don't move." Alpha commands as he glares at her. "Have you finally accepted how useless your Droid Army is?" she sneers. "Well it's too late to stop, so I think I'll say good bye to this base." She reaches for her gun, and fires a shot.

Alpha leans back and dodges the shot. Lyra attempts to fire again but...


Alpha kicks the gun out of her hand and it falls to the floor.


Alpha prepares to kill Lyra but...


Terrorist Captain Kyle shoots Alpha, who dodges the bolt.


Just as Lyra gets up and prepares to kill Alpha, Alpha blasts Kyle in the neck, and is killed. Just as Lyra prepares to fire a shot...


Alpha preapres to duck, but the bolt isn't meant for him. The bolt hits Alpha's pistol, which falls to the ground.


Alpha dodges Lyra's many shots, and grabs her by the neck, and throws her against the wall. She immediately falls unconscious. Alpha shoots her a couple times, to make sure she is dead.


Alpha reaches for the control panel, and types in a deactivation code. The countdown stops, and the detonation gun blows up. Satisfied, Alpha pulls out a thermal detonator.


Alpha attaches the thermal detonator to the control panel, and sets a detonation timer for five minutes. He then runs out of the base.


Five minutes later, the detonator explodes, however, it turns out the detonator slightly malfuntioned, so it didn't blow up the base. However, the control panel blew up. The power generator stops sending energy through the two power crystals.


The generator collapses and explodes. The Techno Union officers body is ripped in half, as he was the closet to the detonation. It causes a chain reaction, and soon, the whole base goes out in a big BOOM! Alpha watches from his ship, The Crusader, as the base goes into flames and explodes. He also sees Viper and Arth in a ROS, but doesn't pursue.

There you have it. I think thats the last part of Terrorism... OR IS IT?


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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by commander crusher on Mon Sep 01, 2008 9:41 pm

That was cool was there another picture that didn't come through. Shocked Run away!

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Mon Sep 01, 2008 9:42 pm

Yes, I will fix that once the bug goes away.

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by commander crusher on Mon Sep 01, 2008 9:43 pm

I tihnk it is cool so far.

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by -Aki- on Mon Sep 01, 2008 9:52 pm

Nice! Is Alpha turning good?
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Mon Sep 01, 2008 10:05 pm

Aki-kundu wrote:Nice! Is Alpha turning good?

Nope, he is just doing this to save his own skin. He's a CIS scientist who later helps find a crystal for the Death Star's superlaser.

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Bly on Mon Sep 01, 2008 10:09 pm

great scene - I really love your storylines! Smile
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Comrade Faie on Tue Sep 02, 2008 12:34 am

commanderbly42 wrote:great scene - I really love your storylines! Smile

I second that! This was by far the best storyline yet! Good job! Fordo Yo!

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by J4ke on Tue Sep 02, 2008 12:40 am

Nice vig, simple but detailed, in a sense. The story is good too.

Aren't harpoons a little low-tech for these chaps though? Wink

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by -Aki- on Tue Sep 02, 2008 10:44 am

Talk about brutal! That is the most violent one yet Razz!
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Axel on Tue Sep 02, 2008 12:27 pm

J4ke wrote:Nice vig, simple but detailed, in a sense. The story is good too.

Aren't harpoons a little low-tech for these chaps though? Wink

Hey, at least they're fun! Which would you rather; a gun that kills the clean way, or a gun that fires giant pieces of pointy metal at people? Smile
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Alpha on Tue Sep 02, 2008 3:21 pm

Aki-kundu wrote:Talk about brutal! That is the most violent one yet Razz!

That's because they're terrorists. Razz

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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by DarthPineapple on Tue Sep 02, 2008 4:42 pm

This is one of the comics in which you actually made a decent MOC. I still advise to use some text baloons.
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Astor on Tue Sep 02, 2008 8:14 pm

The crusader? Will you build and post it?
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by CAPTAINREX on Tue Sep 02, 2008 11:33 pm

great story. I love the characters you have thought of. 10/10
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Clonecommando007 on Tue Sep 02, 2008 11:39 pm

Umm...with a few seconds of scrolling through, all I saw were a bunch of people randomly shooting each other, and then they all die. Text bubbles make it more interesting? Possibly? Probably? Definantly. Good work though.
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Re: Quath Assault-Betrayal

Post by Zepher on Wed Sep 03, 2008 1:43 am

That's not true. If you follow who the characters are you don't need text bubbles. It's a story, not a comic.
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