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Post by cln-cmndo on Sun May 10, 2009 10:06 pm

Yeah, I know. It's short. Too bad. Please tell me what you think of the effects!


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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Clonecommando007 on Sun May 10, 2009 10:14 pm

Thumbs down That would have been a mediocre opening of a comic. "How are you?" "Got to go" "Bye" "Being Boarded!" For a holo like that just to set the scene you really on need a couple slides if that, and keep in mind it should be setting the scene...for the rest of the comic. Wink

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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Code_Green on Sun May 10, 2009 10:17 pm

It was cool, but it didn't really have a point. Just some clone talking to another clone and asking how he has been (We don't really get an answer from the holo-clone) and then they get borded. There is no action, and the clones don't really talk very "clonish" (like: "Yes, sir! Right away, sir! Negative."). The hologram was cool, though. Smile

This was my first realy critical post (I hoped this day would never come Sad ).

Hope your next comic will be better. Smile
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Gerrard on Sun May 10, 2009 10:30 pm

The hologram is well done, but really?

"Buy Bye"

"Well, I've got to go" Cya later?

And when the clone said, "How are you", he never answered.

Keep working on it!
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Alpha on Mon May 11, 2009 12:09 am

No plot, no action, nothing.

I would hardly even call this a teaser. Sad

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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by PhiMa on Mon May 11, 2009 12:33 pm

Well....the effects (the Hologram) are good...

BUT

I'm sorry, this is a sad excuse for a comic. It's way to short, and the dialogue is just unfitting for clones. "Buh-bye? I'm fine, how are you" Clones don't chit-chat with each other like that.

Room for improvement.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by cln-cmndo on Mon May 11, 2009 1:44 pm

He didn't answer because they were suddenly atacked, and this was just setting the scene for the next one. So chill.


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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by MikeZulu on Mon May 11, 2009 3:26 pm

You should have posted this with the rest of your comic when you finished it....

Then again, now that you know that we think the dialogue sucks, you can fix that with the rest of the comic.

Be consistent with the font size and position in the bubbles - and spellcheck (boarded, not borded)
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Sialboats on Mon May 11, 2009 8:57 pm

You're... kidding me Shocked .


The dialog sounds simply aweful. AWE-FUL. Yeah, your hologram was a step on the right path, but everything else is rubbish. The set's just the inside of a converted ISD Wink, the crew is absent, so on so forth.

Please, FINISH your comics first, and actually BUILD sets Smile .
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by cln-cmndo on Mon May 11, 2009 9:02 pm

Unfortunately, I am a TERRIBLE builder when it comes to vehicles, or even the inside of 'em.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Delta 1608 on Mon May 18, 2009 11:41 pm

The holo was Great. Smile but as everyone has told you, dialogue, read the Republic commando books, they have a lot of clone dialogue. Like deece, which is a clone slang word for a DC-15/17, etc..., it will be very helpful. Kashyyyk Oh and always when talking about comics, listen to Sialboats, he knows Everything.


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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by foxrex101 on Mon May 18, 2009 11:43 pm

This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Delta 1608 on Mon May 18, 2009 11:49 pm

foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.
Calm down, it's not the worst, He could of done it in in two frames or worse, and you got to admit, the holo was cool. Smile
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by foxrex101 on Mon May 18, 2009 11:52 pm

Delta 1608 wrote:
foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.
Calm down, it's not the worst, He could of done it in in two frames or worse, and you got to admit, the holo was cool. Smile


Dude have you seen the other peoples comics. For example Sial is amazing with Holos and he still makes a better comic. Just because he made holograms doesn't mean that this is the best comic ever. If you want to know how to make a holo lik he did just type in GIMP in the search button and go to the first page and click the link that tells you how where to find how to make holos.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Alpha on Mon May 18, 2009 11:59 pm

It's not terrible, it's just that ClnCmdo isn't capable of thinking of a plot or dialouge.

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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by foxrex101 on Tue May 19, 2009 12:00 am

Well yeah it's just that I had hopes for him after seeing his two older comics I thought he could do a little more, but he still fails to amuse me.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Delta 1608 on Tue May 19, 2009 12:02 am

Didn't I say it was the best, all I said was that it could be worse, I mean the holo could have been a guy painted BLUE. Smile
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by foxrex101 on Tue May 19, 2009 12:02 am

Delta 1608 wrote:Didn't I say it was the best, all I said was that it could be worse, I mean the holo could have been a guy painted BLUE. Smile


I know what you mean I think you should look at his two other comics before you really get amused with this one.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by legorevolution on Tue May 19, 2009 12:09 am

STOP SPAMMING THIS THREAD NOW!
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by foxrex101 on Tue May 19, 2009 12:10 am

legorevolution wrote:STOP SPAMMING THIS THREAD NOW!


Okay I get the memo. Sorry ClnCmndo I feel so bad formyself Sad Sad .
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Delta 1608 on Tue May 19, 2009 12:13 am

Ok, I take that back, but were you referring to his worst comic, or that the comic is the worst on the CABG? AH never mind!
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by cln-cmndo on Tue May 19, 2009 12:58 am

Now I feel insulted... But all of you should just calm down... Thanks Revo.

BTW, my next comic will have some action.
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Sceptrio1289 on Tue May 19, 2009 1:06 am

I thought it would be cool if The holo guy was shot THEN the holo disaperd

Use a spell checker!
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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Rook on Tue May 19, 2009 2:53 pm

Nice way to test your Gimping skills but please work on the plot.


foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

Join the Guild. Then you'll may have earned the right to even think this statement. :ROOOOOOL:

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Re: 83rd Legion Chronicles 3

Post by Sialboats on Tue May 19, 2009 9:31 pm

Rook wrote:
foxrex101 wrote:This is an insult to the people of the CABG! Remeber we are the CABG so I know you can do alot better. This is definately the worst comic I have ever seen in my life. No offense.

Join the Guild. Then you'll may have earned the right to even think this statement. :ROOOOOOL:



I'm sorry Rook - but the combination of that failpost plus your retort was most enjoyable Razz !
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