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To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Zepher on Mon Jun 21, 2010 8:00 pm

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Editor's Note: The problem with Jesus scenes is two-fold. The first is mechnical, my camera for some reason has troulbe focusing on people if the set is white. Who knows why. The second is that the set is boring as hell. There is no eye candy, and add in the fact that I'm dulling down the already boring colors, well, I mean, not much to look at. So, I have to hope that in all Jesus scenes the story that is being told is good enough to capture your attention completely. Anyway, tell me if the story line got you this far, and please LEAVE A COMMENT TELLING ME HOW TO IMPROVE/WHAT YOU LIKED. It helps!
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Caboose on Mon Jun 21, 2010 8:08 pm

Well the story line defiantly has me hooked. I can't wait fro the plot to completely unfold. If you want colors and eye candy maybe bring the story out of the lab and into the town. Possibly make the town one of
your rainbow cities.
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Tac on Mon Jun 21, 2010 8:09 pm

It needs more flowers and french people. Razz
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Zepher on Mon Jun 21, 2010 8:13 pm

Caboose wrote:Well the story line defiantly has me hooked. I can't wait fro the plot to completely unfold. If you want colors and eye candy maybe bring the story out of the lab and into the town. Possibly make the town one of
your rainbow cities.

I have in previous issues, just not in this one, which needed to take place with Jesus, who is in containment.

Tac wrote:It needs more flowers and french people. Razz

It has had flowers. I'll work on the French. Wink

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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Troopa Daisy on Mon Jun 21, 2010 8:36 pm

This one is good, it's just shorter than the previous ones. I think it would be better if they were all about the same length. Smile
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Alpha Beta on Tue Jun 22, 2010 12:19 am

I'm a little disappointed, you've always had an eloborate story line, but now you go back to "The Aliens are Coming", it's been used too many times, think originally! I know that we are only 5 issues into it, but still. Make it more mysterious, like its not that they are coming, but it is what they bring with them, a disease, a curse, and unbeatable creature, etc. Don't get me wrong, I still love the comic, but I think that you could do better than that. Wink
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by bl*c on Tue Jun 22, 2010 12:28 am

^How do you now Jesus isn't lying? How do you know he's indeed the good guy?

I think you had Green interrupt to keep us guessing at the truth. (Did you?)


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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Zepher on Tue Jun 22, 2010 2:16 am

Troopa Daisy wrote:This one is good, it's just shorter than the previous ones. I think it would be better if they were all about the same length. Smile

They've all averaged 20 pages. i think 1 issue may have been 21, but thanks.

Alpha Beta wrote:I'm a little disappointed, you've always had an eloborate story line, but now you go back to "The Aliens are Coming", it's been used too many times, think originally! I know that we are only 5 issues into it, but still. Make it more mysterious, like its not that they are coming, but it is what they bring with them, a disease, a curse, and unbeatable creature, etc. Don't get me wrong, I still love the comic, but I think that you could do better than that. Wink

Well, you really don't know much about these aliens yet, now do you? He said he had to warn them that they were coming, not WHY he had to warn them.

bl*c wrote:How do you now Jesus isn't lying? How do you know he's indeed the good guy?

I think you had Green interrupt to keep us guessing at the truth. (Did you?)

Of course. If in Issue 5 I gave away the whole story, what fun would that be? All i gave you was that Jesus is a little less of a prisoner than you thought, and that somewhere out there, there is a threat!

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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Caboose on Tue Jun 22, 2010 11:01 pm

Yes, I know he is in containment, I was talking about when maybe he escapes when the aliens invade. Keep up the good work. And, uh, I always wondered what your avatar was.
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Zepher on Fri Jun 25, 2010 8:04 pm

Caboose wrote:Yes, I know he is in containment, I was talking about when maybe he escapes when the aliens invade. Keep up the good work. And, uh, I always wondered what your avatar was.

Who said the aliens would ever invade? Bwahaha. I like seeing everyone's predictions. And my avatar is a toucan wearing a pilot's helmet.

Next issue should be up Sunday or Monday!
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by eclipsegrafx on Fri Jun 25, 2010 8:17 pm

I don't follow many stories on here but this one definitely has me hooked. You are on track.

Camera issues: Check your camera settings, mine used to do the same thing until I turned off my macro settings.

Another thing I would like is for ALL the issues to have the links to each chapter on top. Basically updating that AND your signature. Razz

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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by Caboose on Fri Jun 25, 2010 9:56 pm

Zepher wrote:
Caboose wrote:Yes, I know he is in containment, I was talking about when maybe he escapes when the aliens invade. Keep up the good work. And, uh, I always wondered what your avatar was.

Who said the aliens would ever invade? Bwahaha. I like seeing everyone's predictions. And my avatar is a toucan wearing a pilot's helmet.

Next issue should be up Sunday or Monday!
Hmm, aliens might not invade. :scratch: I got it! Jesus is pregnant and is going to have alien babies who are going to infect the population.
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Re: To Serve As A Warning To Others

Post by bl*c on Fri Jun 25, 2010 10:03 pm

^Sorry if this isn't five words, but WTF? Razz
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