Episode 4: The Invasion of Ingration Part 3: Trap

Season 1
Episode 4
The Invasion of Ingration Part 3: Trap











































Now, since you've already read (or skimmed it) here's a Jinja style summery ( )

-The Jedi and that clone fought bad people
-The other people hid they're gear

Yeah Jinja. That could be it. But more stuff happens. Some action happens, and some character development happens. It adds up.

As for my leaving after my last comic and giving it as a reason... I was kidding. Don't be soft on me (not that you would be ) just becuase of that.

Hope you enjoyed. Next week's set is more detailed, promise Faie

-Zeph

I love this one, Zeph, you are really good at these.

Nice, although it could use some better lasers and stuff.

This was pretty cool! I like the part when they get that clone armour from that box.

I can guess that soon the 313th will have a new ally...

I like his suit.

But nice job on this Zeph, it turned out really well!

Well, nothing too impressive but good for character development.

Jens pretty much summed it up for me. Plot progression. There's a resistance movement formed in the city (why else would they be hiding clone gear from the droids), our Jedi Hero and his counterpart kill some people, and get captured from the looks of it, when reinforcements arrive. GIMPing was meh.

My two credits .

Oh and you forgot to add a line:

IT'S A TRAP!

Okay. Just since I suck at story telling, I need some text to eplain.

The "mover's" were clone in disguise. I think that's apparent next episode. This one it isn't really shown.

As for the reinforcements that join them... according to Sial... I'm sorry, but I have zero idea what your refering too.

And yeah. I agree. This isn't a real epic episode, probaly my least favorite of the ones I've made so far, and the least favorite out of the whole Invasion Story. It's basically just to get characters where I want them.

It's nice Zeph!

One nitpick, your guys are too "robotic". I know it's Lego, but the positioning of the characters are kinda off. Most of them are standing up straight. Maybe bend them a bit too add more variety and spice to your comic!

Thunder-blade wrote:It's nice Zeph!

One nitpick, your guys are too "robotic". I know it's Lego, but the positioning of the characters are kinda off. Most of them are standing up straight. Maybe bend them a bit too add more variety and spice to your comic!

Thanks so much!

Really, this is the perfect example of good criticing. What's wrong, how I can fix it, and all put in a none negative way! This is exactly what I was looking for as a good guildie. Maybe my endorsement will change

*foresees Jinja rushing off to give good criticism in a non-negative fashion in many topics*

Well... it's too 'colorful'.

When you look at a city, what colors do you see? Shades of gray. Other colors are MINIMAL. When you look at Tatooine, what colors do you see? Tan.

You need a SPECIFIC set of colors for your planet. Not yellow in one comic, red in another, and next, green.



Action was 'alright', but I guess you have to really have a 'set' storyline. So far, I know the Jedi are 'split up' or something, but other than that, there's no plot. It changes from comic to comic, but you can, however, have two stories by stopping an idea/action, then coming back to it 1-2 comic(s) later.

Oh wait, strike that, nevermind.

This comic, you're trapping/capturing the CIS General, whilst your other guy is destroying the ShieldGen?

Thanks Alfi.

Seriously, it has nothing to do with this being my topic. These are the things that make CABG great. This is what's been lacking lately with all the noobs. The new members are only like "I like this." "Me 2." and "Wow. I like clones. Want to send me that Twi'lek?" Where some old members are only able to say "WHAT AN IDIOT! YOU SUCK!" This is what really has been annoying me. I may have to use these as examples in the Modership thread.

Alpha wrote:Oh wait, strike that, nevermind.

This comic, you're trapping/capturing the CIS General, whilst your other guy is destroying the ShieldGen?

Yes. I'll make a character guide soon so their easier to follow, but here's what's happening.

Comic 2 - Old Papa (Yellow clone) takes down the sheild generator so the rest of the army can land

Comic 3 - Kuplo (Dark Red) clears a path for the two teams. Marik (Dark Red Too) and Versilles (Police) are going to capture villian, while Papa and Gruff (Other Jedi) go to shut down the CIS control tower.

Comic 4 - Marik and Versilles try to capture the CIS general, but are cpatured themselves by bounty hunters who were hired by the general to capture them.

Haha!

I find this laughable, Alpha is trying to post a good comment, yet this is negated by him double posting!

JK Alf

I agree, I see your point.

But I just don't comment on EVERY topic, but when I do, I'm either spamming it, or I'm giving criticism.



Teeb, shut yer trap.

Wait... people are actually going out of their way to be a admirable poster ? I thought that responsibility came with the guild membership, not because Zeph is looking for an example for his Mod Post about it... *eyeroll* .

That wasn't my original intent... I was giving a comment to Zeph, and then Zeph complimented me and Alf.....

You know what happens.

'Atta thing! Random stuff=win! Even though the crates weren't random the still gave detail to the set! The battle scene was a bit hard to follow, overall it is a good comic but there's just that one step to make!