Episode 2: The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing

Season 1
Episode 2
The Invasion of Inagration Part 1: Landing













































-Zeph

Why the scout trooper skeleton?

He's the assain droid. You'll find our more about him in later episodes.

Gah, sorry, grammar Nazi instinct is too strong: You ought to have written "shouldn't have" and "could have", rather than of. Also, why did the droid at the beginning need to lock on? That was practically point-blank range.

Eh, apart from that, it was alright. Hard to make 'some clones get shot' compelling, but you did pretty well for it.

great so far!

I see you reused Lorman's place

The Jinja Ninja wrote:

Also, why did the droid at the beginning need to lock on? That was practically point-blank range.

Eh, apart from that, it was alright. Hard to make 'some clones get shot' compelling, but you did pretty well for it.

This is just an intro to the invasion, I didn't want to make it compelling.

And I don't know. The droid needed to say something. Maybe becuase they were moving is why he had to lock on...

Jens wrote:great so far!

I see you reused Lorman's place

Actually, those pics were taken before the AN day, his place was this reused

Okay, plot works, makes sense. Fire effect was a little meh, there being too much and not properly perspectived. The scene of combat was okay, a little reused, but okay.

All in all, a standard comic . Not too special, but not a flaming hunk of crap, either .

Eh, I'll take what I can get from you Sials

Zepher wrote:Eh, I'll take what I can get from you Sials

I'm just giving my two credits, thats all .

That Twi'lek general is a real know-it-all isn't he? I like the alley idea, by the way.

Sweet comic! I like the effects! That ship is... is AWESOME!!! To bad it got blown to pieces. I love the clone with the backpack. To bad he bit the dust. Well, awesome comic!! Cannot wait to see what happens next!

Clonecommando007 wrote:That Twi'lek general is a real know-it-all isn't he? I like the alley idea, by the way.

He's the main evil character. I'm going for a Joker/Know-it-all/Annoying Guy/Calm figure ffor him

And thanks Felix! The ship is my "Iron Condor"

great job so far! Sounds like this will be a good start to a whole seris. Which it is.....

I forgot to coment great comic, Zeph.

Wow, great comic Zeph! Couldn't stop reading it! The special effects are really good too!

Gerrard wrote:Wow, great comic Zeph! Couldn't stop reading it! The special effects are really good too!

Thanks. I hate working with flames, I try to pick a spot that they orginate from, so to form them into more of balls and shape them around objects.

Zepher wrote:

Gerrard wrote:Wow, great comic Zeph! Couldn't stop reading it! The special effects are really good too!

Thanks. I hate working with flames, I try to pick a spot that they orginate from, so to form them into more of balls and shape them around objects.

Yeah, they are hard to make. Well, it still turned out good!

Wow, this is great. Special effects are very good!!!

Well, this actually was sort of bad. You skipped around too much and it was as if the clones become dead the second they get out of the alley.

6/10

Two other things:
Where the H*LL do you get the eggs!?
a lot of people say to when they need to say too and vice versa.

Sorry, skipped around to much? There was only one group of clones...

Hmmm...
This isn't your best work, and the condor gets blown up after like 12 seconds?
It seemed too rushed because it jumped too much, like 'Oh were out here', 'Oh now were in an alley' 'Oh now were dead'.
And to be frank, I don't like the condor very much, its ok...but you could make a better ship.

Woah, that's kinda confusing. Not really, it just jumps a lot. Was that droid taking the Condor out at point blank? Either way, good comic. Nice assassin droid!

Commander_Fox wrote:Woah, that's kinda confusing. Not really, it just jumps a lot. Was that droid taking the Condor out at point blank? Either way, good comic. Nice assassin droid!

It didn't jump a lot ... it jumps as much as my comics do, which isn't very much (two-three scene changes).

Very nice special effects indeed. I like this one!

Uberlag wrote:Hmmm...
This isn't your best work, and the condor gets blown up after like 12 seconds?
It seemed too rushed because it jumped too much, like 'Oh were out here', 'Oh now were in an alley' 'Oh now were dead'.
And to be frank, I don't like the condor very much, its ok...but you could make a better ship.

I agree. The condor is fairly sucky. but I'm going to wait for much later to redo it. It was my first ship, and when I redo it, I plan to redo it completely and very nicely. It will get upgraded periodically throughout the series, but I also admit, it's certainly not my best.

As for it's jumps, I'm sorry, but I honestly don't understand that. Each slide takes place at tops 5 or so seconds after the one before it, other than the second and third, which have a slight time laspe. Sorry if that's confusing, next time i'll show them flying through space for a long time !

Final topic. Battles, especially stealth missions, don't really last that long. They're fairly quick. It was only a skirmish. The real battle is yet to come, and that will take quite a few comics up, so don't worry. I know it was fast. It was really to introduce Vimpu and Old Papa, with some action, becuase, well, if they just sat around in a room introducing each other, I'd stop reading too.